There is such an honest flow to your wording, I like the positioning, though I am not familiar with the style. I would really appriciate some kind of discription of it, if you would care to teach me. I am a formalist at heart, and oftentimes it is the format of a piece that speaks to me the loudest.
Passion can be quite a driving force - it should be. Passion manifests in so many forms, and I like the way that your poem allows for all of the sides of passion to show themselves.
A question for you - and I apologize for my tagedian-flavored existentialism - but you mentioned oposing evil (which is just asking for it, in my opinion, lol). How do you define evil? I had thought it was really more or less just a point of view.
Beyond that, wouldn't it be a better idea to live your life working towards something instead of against something? Again, sorry for my existentialist raving, lol. It's just that your poem really inspired me to think - which is a good thing, I imagine.
Beautiful. I'm loving your stuff. The pyre line invoked the image of that gorgeous fellow on my bedroom cieling, Jim Morrison. I can read your work over and over. -romantic sigh- Peace. -rue
Wow. Amazing. I love this. The wording is unbelieveably wonderful. Perfect descriptions. The whole thing is very original. I just can't compliment this enough. My favorite part is the end:
"Incinirated dust Leaves me one last dance Of sensuality and lust I am firebound"
That one really stuck out for me. You are definitely talented. Great job
Submission Name: Firebound
