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    dots Submission Name: Mirror Imagedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       We need to stop dwelling on the way we look and rather work on feeling comfortable in our own skin!


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    dotsMirror Imagedots
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    I look in the mirror
    and the face that I see
    completely and utterly
    disgusts me


    My short brown hair
    should be long and blond
    My thin, bird-lips
    should be fuller and strong

    My face is too fat
    my eyes are too small
    My head is as round
    as a basketball

    My lashes don't curl
    and my brows are too thin
    My nostrils are uneven
    and I don't like my chin

    My skin is too pale
    it's not smooth enough
    My forehead is high
    and my voice is too gruff

    My legs are too long
    my torso's too short
    My fingers are stubby
    and one has a wart

    My hands are too large
    they should be dainty and soft
    My boobs hang too low
    when I take my bra off

    My ears are misshaped
    and my but is too flat
    My thighs are too skinny
    and my stomach's too fat

    And right at that moment
    to my dismay
    I ripped down the mirror
    and threw it away


    The distorted mirror
    showed nothing but lies
    I am a beautiful person
    and have nothing to hide








    Submitted on 2005-08-25 11:11:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow I sure can relate to this one for sure. I hate mirrors. I'm in my 40's and still hate the way I look. Good write. I love the flow.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this because girls especially dwell on how we look in the mirror. You couldn't have said it in any other way, this here should be inspiring to those young girls out there that are getting a bad image from all the celebrities. Great job.

    Michelle
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by michelle8586 | [ Reply to This ]
      And I thought I was the only one who talked about myself like that! lol. This was very good. It was like you gave a honest opinion of what you think you see yourself like in a mirror. I wasn't expecting you tear down the mirror, after your description, I thought you would say something like it was okay to not be what you wanted to be, and you could or would accept what you consider to be flaws. That to me would of brought the whole poem a better closure. To still be disgusted by the end of the poem, you are still not comfortable in your own skin. Everything esle was fantasic. The flow and self decription of the body spoken of was very good. Nice work.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem- and ode to self love. I wouldn't say that I like to look at myself in the mirror but I definitely appreciate who I am. I am not defined by my physical characteristics or material objects, that's why I write, to show the world what's important about me! Good job, your honesty is moving!
    Melissa
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by AngelintheRain | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel a lot of self-bashing going on / the poem it self stands out on its own ./ makes us think of are own self-esstem ../. other then that good write . keep up the realist poems
    JWI
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      That was pretty good. A well written message that most girls (and sometimes guys) today need to hear. Very nicely done, keep it up.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked how it was put together and how true it is for alot of people i liked your word use and i compleatly agree with you i don't think girls or guys should dwell on what they look like compleatly we should be happy for who we are...i guess anyway good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This had a good flow to it, and i think everybody stresses on how they look, but its true it on the inside, thats everything everything counts. good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by withblindedeyez | [ Reply to This ]


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