My Prayer for Peace (2) by Chi-Town Rose

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Author:	Chi-Town Rose
ASL Info:	19/F/Chicago (U.S)
Elite Ratio:	5.05 - 179/180/35
Words:	99

Class/Type:	Poetry/Religious
Total Views:	292
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	620

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I resubmitted this because I got so few comments.

My Prayer for Peace (2) dots

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Each night I lay
before sleep comes
and talk to my creator

I thank Him for the day
for my health, and my family
for my Body, soul, and life

I tell Him of my problems
as if He is unaware
I pour out my hearts pain
and cry tears of agony
in His name

I ask for His strength
His love
His kindness
His mercy
His guidance
In His world of confusion

And once I 'm through
and my last tear falls
a burden is lifted from my shoulders
and I sleep in peace

Submitted on 2005-08-25 11:46:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Janese, this poem is really inspiring. Even though I'm Marc, I can still get a warm feeling from reading this. The only thing that made me a little confused was when u said "...cry tears of agony in his name" because usually that means you're crying because of something they did. Please shine some light on that for me because I really like this poem
| Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]
  Nothing is more important or could ever replace the love of a father for his daughter. Its a very special kind of love, it comes from a place.

This was very nice and warming to read. I honestly cannot understand why this didn't get more comments the first time around! Oh well, I'm sure the comments will start rolling in. Not that you need them though, you know you can write well.

-Ishoes
| Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by iShoes | [ Reply to This ]
  seems like u've got more comments this time. i try 2 give a comment 4 every poem i read. cuz i hate it when people look at my work and don't say anything. this one was good. i think we all need God expecially in times like these. good write.
"troy"
| Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey,
Don't know bout you but i think you got plenty comments this time...and i'm one of them...lol..
Nice write. Not all that profound. More like a confession to God about your wishes and hopes. I got a peace poem although it states we might not have one as long as there is this other thing in our way. "War Zone Under construction" is the name if you wanna find out.

This piece is like a convo with God, the prayers you give Him before you go to bed. Thought of that before but still never wrote anything about it. Sounds like what we normally would do before to go to bed.

You also sounded like you wished for peace but how is that going to happen if all you do is pray for it? Everything starts with you. might as well do something bout it. I wrote something about it in a poem called "Realm of glory" Read it if you want to.

Overall, it's kinda weak but i still liked it. It reminded me of the things i do before i go to bed. If i'm not too tired and don't think of sleep directly. Nice write. Keep it up. Take care.
Peace...Irina
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi Janese,

I got a few things to say to you. I do not care if others do not like what I'm about to discuss with you.

Okay, here it goes...I like your write. Tell me why your write is a, how can I say, taboo when you have people writing poetry about suicide, cutting etc. Their poetry is more accepted. When someone has the guts to write something on the "religious" level, they freak. You wrote this because this is your expression of your feelings for your faith. Too bad to those that do not like it. I say continue believing in your faith no matter who does not see fit to accept. Remember it is your faith, not theirs not mine but yours. Poetry is expression and if that is what you wish to express on, more power to you. I say it is a good write! you take care, wanda
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
  Not a favorite but its honest and sincere. For those who ridicule this poem take a seat and learn to be humble. Reminds me of being a child and saying my nightly prayers. We all have our way of keeping the faith. Nobody said it had to be elegant.
Nice write

Wisdom Seeker
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah... a poem about god.... hmmm.... I dont care for this. Becauses its sterotypical bible thumping action. If its what you are, hey I cant say stop, its who you are. But the poem is so over done, we've heard the words over and over again. Add some spice in your religous poems.
Check out mine
Act I: Confessions
Act II: Ostracism
Act III: Lost to Apathy
Act IV: The Gate And The Arch
Act V: Burning The Faith

Later

Cynyster Cyanide---
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Black-Wall | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow Great job - i think it is beautiful how you put your trust so deeply inbeded into God. I think its amazing and beautiful. It does truely put you at a peice of mind when you pray to him he is like your personal venting service you can tell him everything and you wont get spoken back to or judged and yet you feel uplifted and faithful ...

Great job with this!
xoxox -Thirst4Serenity- xoxox
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]

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