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    dots Submission Name: Like The Shrubsdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLike The Shrubsdots

    just as she was
    but he loved her
    the trees don't stand as tall as they use to
    the leaves fall now
    they die on the ground
    sometimes they won't grow back for a whole year
    they are just dead
    and brown
    and ugly
    just as nature is
    but he loves it
    and she doesn't stand as tall as she use to
    emotions have worn her down
    her skin is dry and yellow and brittle
    her lips are chapped and ripped with sores
    sometimes she won't speak for days
    she's just empty
    but he loves her

    Submitted on 2005-08-25 12:40:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool little thing here. you put us humans into the circle of nature thing and explain beauty in a pretty unique way . . . or something. it is hard to find love like that. and people are so very superficial sometimes i don't know if people just imagine that they fall in love or they really do. it's hard to tell. it's all in your head - right? plus if u love a person for who they are you're gonna love them for all they are . . . whatevers. i forgot what my point was.
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      awww...this was all sad... but I liked it...it was very metaphorical and that was cool...I really liked the structure of this poem...it was good and sad...Bah...I am sorry you are sad...

    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very beautiful this posts depends on the readers mood it could be an old couple withered with age or the beauty of death and reprise of life with nature not everyone will get this post only the writer and the reader that can put any image in the picture you painted
    very nice.
    even though i am not writing i still try to check in
    to see who has posted i've alwaz liked your writing and when i see it i will alwaz read thanx for your kind words on good - bye
    take care
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwww...he is an ol softie like me...loves her even when others dont and even when she doesnt love herself. Now that is a good guy right there I tell ya! I really thought this was an excellent piece and its definately worthy of a cool beans man! I recently went back to the home where I grew up and it seemed to be a lot smaller than what I remembered, ya know? that just struck a chord with me. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      mine still loves me.even though we are not together anymore.everything is different when a love is lost.thing seem not as joyful,dead


    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]

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