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The Jinn standing behind me


Author: darkness
ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
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The Jinn standing behind me



you stand behind me
friend,foe,or passerby

you're huge and creeping up the wall
ten times as big
ten times as tall

are you evil?
are you good?
or are you just standing there?

I can't see you
I can't hear you
so im wondering...

WHY?

Is that ur true form?
or is it just an image
an image ment to decieve upon the wall

Do you stand for truth?
or do you mean my family harm?

a million questions left unansered in my head

I guess i'lll just have to wait.......

wait
until im about to be dead
when the angel comes
to take my soul

my eyes will fully open
and i shall truely be counted amoungst the dead.....




Submitted on 2005-08-25 15:01:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sounds like you might be a little scared of things in life? I like this poem and the way it flows. Keep it up and stop fearing life(smile)
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  U kind of skip from place to place but over all It was really good I mean I like the depth and all.
| Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  Good poem. Flows very well. I'm going to give you a bit of a spell check though.

ur -> your
unansered -> unanswered
im -> I'm
truely -> truly
amoungst -> amongst
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by little_theif | [ Reply to This ]


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