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    dots Submission Name: bloody river flowsdots
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    Author: Seedofbayne
    ASL Info:    19/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 55/82/27
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 327
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       LOVE BLOWS


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    dotsbloody river flowsdots
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    Ten thousand bloody tears i've cried
    ever flowing, my soul has died
    my heart is bursting at it's seams
    i never found out what true love means

    you're like a kid with infinite power
    you lock me up inside your twisted tower
    force feed me your hate and lies
    and all the while my mind shuts down and dies

    my bloody river flows

    and no one knows

    my bloody river goes

    love fucking blows




    Submitted on 2005-08-25 15:26:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "you lock me up inside your twisted tower
    force feed me your hate and lies"

    isn't lo v e grand? i love this line, great imagery.
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by laypearlsaside | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah...Love isn't as great as people assume, life isn't a fairytale and love encourages something false...This is cool, I like it, nice rhythm and rhyming, excellent flow, keep writing
    - Illusion
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Illusion | [ Reply to This ]
      well.. i hope you dont think love blows..cuz it doesnt michael ..well this relly makes me think.. that mayb it kinda was my fault n that i didnt hafta put u threw so much n im sorry for lying to you about brian
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      This is like a spiral of hatered all all falling down - like love is nothing and you have lost so much trust - that you havent learned from all these things that you have went threw and your lost and jumbled and confused - Im sorry ... :( i wish i could fix it ...

    <<3 Always
    -~- ME -~-
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]


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