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    dots Submission Name: Flesh of a New Loverdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsFlesh of a New Loverdots
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    Flesh of a new lover
    so moist
    beneath exploring finger tips
    The scent of sweet lust
    fills the air
    tongue tastes the salty stream
    Explosions
    craving more
    from deep inside
    anticipation begins to flow
    a steady motion
    as bodies collide
    limbs intertwine
    Breathing grows
    faster
    louder
    as teardrops of ecstacy are shed
    with the mind-breaking
    earth-shaking
    final
    release
    Sweat-drenched skin
    glistens in the moonlight.
    Silence now
    laying
    savoring
    every last taste
    of the
    Flesh of a new lover




    Submitted on 2005-08-25 17:28:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how you write your passionate poems. I would really like for you to give me some tips on how to become a better writer with love/passion poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like ur style with the passionate poems. the emotion of showing that ur in lust was great. i really dont have any thing to say to u about changing this cuz it was well written. i didnt see any misspelled words but ill check again. good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your style. You seem to also be a rather sensuous person (as I have been told I am). There is such beauty in the things that take places behind closed doors (Or on top of kitchen tables, or in the backseats of cars, hee hee), and I think more people should express what they feel during these moments. I think you express it beautifully.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      There's always something very delicious about new love, new encounters, new sexual experience. You expose that in your poem very nicely. I like the way you reveal that last rise and fall before the silence taken to gather yourselves, making the memory solid. Euphoric moments held in descriptive words. Nicely done.

    -Grey
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Greyson | [ Reply to This ]
      there seems to be an explosion of writings on this subject,at this websitewhich is keeping me very aroused(lol)just kidding.
    anyways,passion and lust protrayed nicely.for me personally,there in nothing in the world as nice as experencingthe flesh of a new lover.and this gets me in trouble.(lol).protrayl nice as i said.format and feelings could be improved apon.elaboration on why ,how and more into what it was for you.more feelings
    but all that is unimportant.

    all one mans opinion

    cool

    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed reading this one. Passion poems are difficult sometimes. People often fill them with descriptions that are too graphic. But your poem managed to escape this pattern. There is an amount of graphicness in this poem that is just right.
    Rhythm is interesting. Itís changing, but I think that those changes go along with the content of the poem very well.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]


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