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    dots Submission Name: Dance with the Dolphinsdots
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    Author: SHRINKSDR
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 476/375/39
    Words: 191
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       This is exactly where I am. Bethany and Rehoboth beaches. On a much needed vacation. Just soaking it all in Mmmmmmm.


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    Bethany Beach (Delaware)


    Calm waters
    reflect golden rays.
    A thousand diamonds
    In a shimmering sun-dance
    As far As the eye
    Can see.

    Marshmallow sculptures float
    Against a breathtaking
    Blue sky.

    I sit in the fine soft sand
    Of Bethany beach,
    My lady at my side

    The Suns’ warm Tongue
    Laps at my back,
    As the warm, laughing
    Atlantic foam
    Laps my feet

    Sounds abound
    Around me.
    The crashing of the surf,
    Children laughing,
    Screaming in mock fear and excitement,
    Parents calling, cautioning.

    Seagulls circle lazily,
    Calling to each other
    Or perhaps to us.

    All shapes and sizes
    Of bodies bobbing
    In a dance choreographed
    By the roll of the waves.

    In the near distance,
    Two fins side by side
    Gracefully undulate
    Playfully springing above and submerging
    Beneath the waves together.

    A harmony of grace and
    Spirit!

    The dolphins
    Move off in the distance,
    An exclamation point
    For natures perfection!

    I am renewed,
    Calm, relaxed, meditative.
    One with natures’ splendor.
    My spirit dances
    With the Dolphins!





    Submitted on 2005-08-25 17:36:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dauphins are beautiful fun loving creatures and to be able to just sit back, relaxed and watch them at play has got to be a very refreshing vacation indeed. Glad you enjoyed your vacation out by the sea with your friends

    A very refreshing write of nature, Steve!

    ~Linda
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful vacation, Steve. I could see you there, relaxing, arm entwined with your sweetie, the sun warming the sand under your toes.

    Nice, descriptions.

    I felt that this part:

    "In the near distance
    Two fins side by side
    Gracefully undulate
    Playfully leaping out of
    Water together
    A harmony of movement and
    Spirit"

    was a beautiful part, and I could imagine the dolphins catching sight of you sitting with your mate enjoying the sunshine, sand, and surf in a little bit different way.

    Nice sunny piece,

    Take Care!

    Chell
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Nice Steve!
    You have a wonderful way of bringing the reader into your writings. It's as if it were us enjoying all the marvelous sights and sounds you have described here.
    I'm glad you were able to let go of everything and enjoy your vacation in such a lovely way.. and then to bring it here and share it with all of us.
    As others have pointed out.. the ending is just an excellent way to wrap up this enjoyable write.
    How can one be among all of this, take it all in, and NOT have their spirit dance with the dolphins?

    A perfect title to a perfect poem.

    Just lovely.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I haven't been here to read your stuff in a while, but I've seen this on quite a few favorites lists and HAD to see what all the fuss was about and I too will be adding this to my list!
    This was so calming and just plain beautiful. I absolutely adored the last stanza-it was a perfect ending and you carried me through everything that you were seeing beautifully. You took me back to when I was really young, visiting my Great Grandparents on Long Island and going to the beach. I see, hear and smell everything! I really appreciate those memories...most of all I miss those awesome hot dogs that I could only get from the vendor's cart on the beach...yummy!
    Thank you so much for sharing this and taking me back to some very fond memories!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS IS PRETTY GOOD. I REMEMBER SEEING DOLPHINS ALONG THE JERSEY SHORE AND HAVING SIMILAR FEELINGS (IF REINCARNATION IS REAL I WANT TO COME BACK AS A DOLPHIN). I THINK YOU NEED TO DO SOMETHING ABOUT THE STANZAS, HOWEVER. IT MAKES FOR A BIT OF CHOPPINESS (MAYBE DO THIS AS ONE STANZA SINCE IT IS A CONTINUOUS STORY). FEEL FREE TO TAKE OR LEAVE MY SUGGESTIONS. AGAIN, GOOD WORK! :-)

    Calm shimmering waters – SHIMMERING HOW? GIVE THE READER A PICTURE HERE
    As far As the eye
    Can see

    Marshmallow sculptures float – GOOD IMAGE HERE
    Against a breathtaking
    Infinite Blue sky – I WOULD FIND SOMETHING ELSE OTHER THAN ‘INFINITE’; IT SEEMS TOO MUCH TO ME

    I sit in the soft fine sand
    Of Bethany beach
    My lady at my side - NICE

    The Suns’ warm Tongue
    Lapping at my back – AGAIN, GOOD LINES

    As the warm, laughing
    Atlantic foam at
    Waters edge
    Laps my feet – THESE 3 STANZAS ARE GREAT!

    Sounds abound
    Around me
    The crashing of the surf
    Children laughing,
    Screaming in mock fear and excitement
    Parents calling, cautioning

    Seagulls circle lazily
    Calling out
    To each other
    Or perhaps to us
    Requesting some morsel
    Of food – DELETE THIS LINE

    All shapes and sizes
    Of bodies Jumping up and down
    In a dance choreographed
    By the roll of the waves

    Boogey Boards sailing up – THOUGHT IT WAS ‘BOOGIE’; NOT SURE
    With the foam of in-coming waves
    Either alone
    Having lost its rider – NO APOSTROPHE
    Or with screaming delighted child
    On board

    In the near distance
    Two fins side by side
    Gracefully undulate
    Playfully leaping out of
    Water together
    A harmony of movement and
    Spirit

    I watch as the dolphins
    Move off in the distance
    An exclamation point
    For natures perfection – VERY NICE!

    I am renewed
    Calm, relaxed, meditative
    One with natures’ splendor
    My spirit dances
    With the Dolphins – TERRIFIC ENDING!
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Aren't they beautiful? There's just something about dolphins that being in their presence just makes everything right in the world and gives a renewed hope.
    This is great, Steve. The imagery is incredible. It was as if we were by your side, watching what you were. That's true talent my dear. Great write,
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is great. It's wonderfully descriptive and visual. It really brought me right to the waters edge. I don't find anything at all wrong with this I wouldn't change a single word. Thanks for wrting such a great poem.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhh...! Steve this is just lovely! Beautiful and wonderful and YEAY! It's about the beach! My favorite place in the whole wide world! You have done such a fine job writing this one! Your great descriptions have provided me with some terrific images and sounds! And I love the title! Dolphins are so precious! I went to the Bahamas a couple years ago and they had a day trip that we went on where you actually swim with the dolphins! Talk about incredible! I swam with them and sat and petted them...ooooh...so soft and slippery to touch! And they have awesome personalities, they love people! You have provided me with some great thoughts and refreshed some memories with this one! And seagulls too! They are my favorite bird! I have a poem title "Seagull" and I talk about how they are just my favorite bird! I envy their carefree, living on the ocean lifestyle! They are beautiful birds! This vacation has seemed to inspire you as you have written a truly lovely poem! So nicely worded I now have a longing for the beach and I was only just at the beach yesterday! Might just have to take a ride today...or a walk...only 5 minutes to the cove! Thanks for stopping in on your vacation and sharing this lovely scene! Just great! I shall take this one to my page as you have filled my head with lovely thoughts this morning and I am truly grateful! A+

    Lorna
    pssst...I gave ya the vote too!!
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh. how lucky and serene this sounds like the stories my son retold after his return from OBX.
    he looked like an over cooked lobster- i hope you have lots of sun-screen, you poor soul!
    Great reading and really nice to hear your enjoying yourself.
    Send along a few seashells so we might hear the roaring of the surf.
    Later Dude
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm so at the beach...Incredible Steve, absolutely incredible
    What can anyone say - a well deserved vacation has given you a spectacular inspiration
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Steve, I remove my hat and bow to you...

    This is sensatinal, and most easily the best thing of yours I've read.

    I can't change a word here, can't think of a single improvement. All I think is jealousy that I didn't write it myself.

    Stunning. Beautiful. Bravo.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo, bravo, bravo...man, now this is one of those that a person reads and just has to say, "Man, I wish I was that guy right now." Hee-hee. Very good write here doc. I was smilin and you had me sitting right there next to y'all. Hey, seagulls are very beautiful birds, ya know? Their color scheme is cool to me.

    Thanks for going on vacation and blessing us with a beautiful vision. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      OH, I want to be there! I liked the harmony of 2s. Sun & sea foam lapping at you, the interplay b'tween humans & birds, the dolphins, the interface of ocean & land. That's where it all happens. This is peaceful & dynamic at the same time. I liked the image of the waves choreographing the action ... original and you know, that's how it REALLY is! cool
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by CleoCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      This writing has such a comfortable feel to it. Just basking away. Loved the imagery and detail about it. One can almost picture the scene. Description of dolphins as exclamation points was great. Nice job.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      funny, i just wrote a piece about the healing powers of nature with seagulls and seals... nature is an incredible salve and is always available to us. it is nice to find someone else who appreciates that and can bask in its beauty. thanks for the soothing, delightful read!
    peace&dolphines
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      marshmallow sculptures that's marvelous love also the infinite blue sky. shimmering waters, i like the sparkles on the waters, it looks like little speckled diamond crystals and its a free gift from nature. the gulls flying can almost hear the sounds. the sun's warm tongue that is also magnificent. i just wrote about fire's many tongues ha ha are we thinkin alike here?
    laughing atlantic foam brilliant way to capture sound. i like the two lines "In a dance choreographed By the roll of the waves" and another one that hits me greatly "An exclamation point For natures perfection" that one is immortal...another must save. you never cease to amaze me, Steve. you are truly a blessed poet, now if only we can get you to write more,
    mike
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]


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