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    dots Submission Name: the fearless flirtdots

    Author: Boom-boom
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 56/54/25
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 984
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       Just something I wrote. It definately needs work but I really like the concept... any way tell me how it can be improved

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    dotsthe fearless flirtdots

    I see you,
    standing alone,
    single female in a gaggle of men
    swarmed by their undying affection
    washed in their lust
    all loud smiles,
    and carefully placed body language,
    professional of the ireputable game.
    criminal without a care
    Innocent, gulity,
    and wildest dreams come into being
    All of them wanting to know you,
    wanting you.
    I can see your confident glance
    as you rest your hand on the suitor to your left
    the gentle caress of a predator
    braving into the unknown territory
    past embarassment and rejection
    graceful and unyeilding
    drawing in any of your choosing
    magnatism hypnosis,
    all with the bat of an eyelash,
    and the swivel of hips
    power in high heels and pink lipstick
    the fearless flirt

    Submitted on 2005-08-25 18:55:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh the fabulosity of being a girl who knows how to work her manolos. So everyone that replied to this in such a negative context to the character.
    But, if you look at in in a different light, you could see her as full of confidence, poise, and she might even be interesting. Just because she is a "fearless flirt" doesn't mean shes a hoe. There was a quote for Coco Chanel made by djuna barnes once: (my personal favorite quote)
    "Observe how the woman who attracts all eyes comes into a room... Why, amoung twenty, fifty, a hundered, is she the most attractive, be she tall or short, dark or fair, athletic or feminine? Because she knows HOW she wants to walk, WHY she wants to sit down, and to WHAT her gestures are related. She is herself."
    Of course, she could be that pretentious girl that all the other ladies envy, but really, I think she embodies what all girls want to have: Absolute confidence.
    Overall, I pretty much loved this. Much like the power of persuasion of the character, this poem is very persuasive and evokes images.
    Oh to be in highschool again!
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh, this reminds me of someone I know. That makes me mad. Not that flirting is a bad thing, it just seems like the one in this poem whose "past embarassment and rejection" thinks she's so hot that no one will turn her down. Anywho, girls like that DO think the world revolves around them, but you know what? In my opinion the guys that oggle them and pay so much attention to them kind of make it hard for the chick to think otherwise.

    End transmission.
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Mrs Peabody | [ Reply to This ]
      This would probably appeal to men more than women - for obvious reasons. I think you did a great job and the picture you portrayed was vivid and real.
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      The was different but i like it
    good use of imagery and [censored] like that.
    from a guys point of view the girls or just hoes to me.
    well hope to hear foom you and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. yes i can say i hate girls like that too
    they think the world should revovle around them.. but sadly enuff it doesnt.. i say we take them all n kill 'em.. ha
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my god i HATE chicks like that. your poem was fantastic. all the images that flooded my head and your choice of words were dead on. but man... i HATE chicks like that.

    "power in high heels and pink lipstick"

    the best by far cuz it's the honest to god truth. awesome work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]

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