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    dots Submission Name: Wild Thingdots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 806
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 645



    Description:
       Is this literal? It could be about our border collie, who can't be embarrassed (b'coz y'all won't tell him you read about him, will you?)
    Or it could be teen angst, or even political. HAHAHA!


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    dotsWild Thingdots
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    When Alpha male brought you home for me
    O! Leaping, thrashing furry goodness
    I was compelled to rip open
    your wild thing heart
    To empty it-a sopping vulgar husk
    At that moment a novel feeling,
    a tickling in the balls
    How glorious! I must...
    Virgin ape, two stimulating shades of red
    With inattentive lips and
    George Bush eyes
    Object of my teenage dog lust
    I make you mine
    with ragged breathing
    Mine with urgent focus
    a furtive crouch
    a frustrated positioning
    I make you nasty as a crackhouse couch




    Submitted on 2005-08-25 19:12:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I keep getting the image of a dog humping like hell on a stuffed gorilla or something. I have no idea. I did get a chuckle, just not sure what it's about.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      I am rather lost in this one as well. This was really a maze of metaphors for me. I can't determine the humor in it. I can't really cypher it. I enjoyed reading it. I just feel that it needs a little bit more of a clear definition.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm. My jury is still out, but I have a theory...a clever and cunning theory...

    So as not to give the game away (in the unheard of situation in that my theory is correct) I shall pm you with what I have come up with, and wait in a cute embarrassment for your disdainful reply.

    I remain

    Yours Truly,

    Me

    (did I mention that I thought this was extremely well-written?)

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I guess I have the true insight on this piece. Don't worry hunnie i ain't telling unless they beg... a little. Typical piece expanding your boundless ability and wordsmythery. I don't mean typical in a negative sense, but typical in the caliber of poetic ability I hope to one day emulate.

    your soul mate
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I aint sure what this is either ma dear, but its frustrating as heck...goes from a sexual tone to a political point and has a possessiveness quality to it in some fashion. Either way, it did somehow manage to tickle my balls enough for me to comment on it, though I am not sure if it was a good type of tickle or a bad one, HA! Alright, that sums it up, this one left me just as confused as you seem to be with it, but thats the beauty of it, ya know? Way to keep me thinking.
    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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