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    dots Submission Name: WATCHING THE HANDSdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 665
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    Bytes: 544



    Description:
       this referres to how life goes on even when you dont think it should even when it hurts to watch it


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    Its funny how grieve comes in waves
    The numbness departs to leave only anger.
    It never really goes away though .
    It just morphs into something new.
    The trees turn an ugly brown .
    The beaches close.
    People stroll by humming .
    The world spins on its flimsy axel .
    Still you die inside.
    With the questions comes an odd strength.
    A callus forms between you and the truly living.
    You stumble through the rest of the living time.
    Waiting for the reunion .




    Submitted on 2005-08-25 19:15:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree ! It created lots of imagery and that does it for me. I really liked the way you handled this and the flow was good and it hung together really well.
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      ya...i dont understand word...probably cuz im young...but i like hwat it was about...it sounded emo tho! good! ill add it to my favs cuz i like what its aobut!

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    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this. The imagery was great. It was very distant. It really helped the whole feel of the poem. I really wish it was longer. Some lines were alittle long and it messed up the flow but the theme and imagery was great. I really did love it.

    Never alone: Haley
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]


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