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    dots Submission Name: ANNdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       have you ever met someone who just inspires you and you cant put your finger on why that is true of my eaer freind ann i saw her last night and had to write about it hmmm not dsure why anyway here it is

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    Annís hands seem too small to have felt so much .
    She is to fragile to harbor such strength
    I am convinced she feels the worlds weight more than most.
    Like she holds up her life with just her finger.
    I cant explain her innocent light.
    Its like a soothing glow from a childís nursery.
    She cant see her eyes the way he does.
    I can tell she is unsettled by it.
    Blow the dust from the pages.
    Brush the hair from her cheek
    Sheís there silently waiting
    Take a deep breathe and read .
    In deepest dedication :A.L.F.

    Submitted on 2005-08-25 19:17:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sounds like a person who has tasted most things in life. Nice to se a really good poem of dedication to someone who you obviously look to and admire - well done.
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a nice thing to do dedicating a poem to someone whos inspired you so much. you really should show this to her. she sounds like one of those people whos been through so much in her life but is still standing strong. not a lot of people can do that either cuz some times certain events tear people apart. anyways this was very nice and im sure she would like this if she read it. nicely done on this!

    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      wow wut a dedication..i hope you show this to her so she can see just how special she is in ur eyes..she but b awesome tho cuz the way you describe makes her sound as tho shes had some tough times
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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