I enjoyed reading this. It seemed very well written in regards to form, imagery, and imagination.
The evil desert of fear. How to escape without dying? Does reincarnation apply here : ) JC.
It would take me a long time to sculpt my words into a poem this grande. You put such a plot so beautifully, you humble me, good shoggoth. I like how the desert eats him up. Just another victim... another casualty of... paranoya... with a y... that rocks so hard. Seriously. That could be a band name. Paranoya. I love it. Bloody brilliant. Peace.-rue
I like the imagry you used and how you express fear in the form of a desert. I can relate to fear being a downfall. I fear so many things and they hold me back in life and are never really justified. My favorite line is..
now just fewer moments lie before i breath my last breath the evil desert fed at last feasting on another death
I thought the wole poem flowed really well and the ryme sceme is very clever. I really good poem and now one of my favorites!