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    dots Submission Name: Masterpiece Theatredots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 625
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       I was thinking about what a sensational actress I am with Tony. I be whatever it is he wants me to be.


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    I play the sexy temptress
    Cause that's the way to get into your pants.
    I talk about my lacy thong,
    Offer you a sexy dance.
    I whisper naughty things in your ear,
    Caress places I shouldn't touch.
    I'll say anything I have to say
    To fill your eyes with lust.

    I play the funny best friend.
    I listen to anything you say.
    I give you laughter with my silly stories,
    Make you have a great day.
    I'll take you places that you want to go.
    I'll give you anything you need.
    I do what I can to make you smile,
    No matter how much I bleed.

    I play the helpless little girl,
    With the crazy, tousled hair.
    It brings out the protector in you
    When I curl around my teddy bear.
    You take me in your arms
    When I cry those salty tears.
    You apologize for all the wrongs
    You did that put me here.

    I can play the role that makes me safe
    For you to put your trust in me.
    Or the role that makes your heart beat faster
    When I get down on my knees.
    I can be blond and ditzy.
    I can be really smart.
    But I just don't know the role to play
    To get back in your heart.




    Submitted on 2005-08-26 10:18:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one turned to be much more than I expected. I thought itís just another sexy poem, but Ö Slowly it turns in to something much deeper. The truth is that we act, most of the time, some of us all the time. Itís a bitter and sometimes humiliating truth.
    You cold work more on the flow and rhyming, besides that it is a very good poem.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]


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