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My love for you will never end

Author: MurphyGirl44
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My love for you will never end

Sitting in the passenger seat, rays of sunlight streaming in through the window... My skin is warm and my face is lit up with a smile...
He takes one hand off the wheel and I place my hand in his... He plays with the skin in-between my fingers, and fondles the ring on my finger...
I squeeze his hand and he squeezes back, my love for him is what warms me to the very bone...and his love for me...
A few seconds later his hand is pulled from my grip,I see an overturned tractor trailer in the road, I close my eyes and hold on tight...
I awake with a searing headache and dried blood on my skin...My heart seems to stop as realization sinks in... I reach for his hand... it is cold and limp...
Everything comes flooding back to me...the screeches of the brakes, the shattering of the glass, his screams...his screams...They echo inside my head...
I feel myself being lifted from the car...and I reach for his hand...I scream "No , no", I can't leave him, I refuse to believe hes... dead...
Tears stream down my face and burn my cheeks...I reach for his hand one last time and when I'm pulled away his ring is clenched tightly in my hand...
It's been years now... But I have his ring on a chain around my neck...and I fondle it constantly...Just like he used to fondle mine...

Submitted on 2005-08-26 13:25:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice poem-or whatever it was, but I wish it could've been written on a happier cause. I can really connect with its words, my sister got into a car accident just last night with her boyfriend, and I thank God no one was hurt. The sense of sadness is overwhelming sinking into my mind as the words silently. I'm so sorry, I know I didn't do anything, but I'm sorry this happened. But besides the sulleness I'd give this poem a 9.4 out of 10.
| Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
  a very deep and personal loss.that is one of my worst fears,going out mangled in a heap of metal,so the topic hit close to home for me.
with the passage of time,you still honor his memory and cherish the memories=he was very lucky to have had ya.

creativity was ok,feelings protrayed nicely.
only thing i can say in the form of criticism is that why did he deserve youre love,or what led you up to feel that way about him.
i just wanted a little more lol

all one persons opinion


| Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
  Upon reading, it made me remember back to a time in my life when I lost someone within my own life, Pebbles, she died of cancer. Although the circumstances of loss for you and I are different, the feelings all came flooding back into my heart upon reading this work. You speak though the pain, shock and loss...of a timeless love...which is why my own mind wondered back to that time within my life..."My heart seems to stop as realization sinks in"...indentical to what I felt...speaking of the ring...reminded me so much of the love I shared with her...the love you have so clearly..showing pure contained within words.
I admire your work... for what it took to write it...recognizing the content.
| Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
  aww.this is very held alot of emotion and i liked it alot ..its being added to the favorites...i mean jus the way everything was put together it jus was like a dream...and if this story is true i am very sorry...and i kno whats its like..and i also ahve the ring on a chain around my neck...great write..keep it up and i look forward to reading more of your peices...
| Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]

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