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    dots Submission Name: Afterlife Created from Storiesdots
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    Author: Naymless
    ASL Info:    15/F/phx, az
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 142/110/33
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 857
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1050



    Description:
       Well this one is about a person who dies and is left to watch over another person. Its kind of like a hauted house setting, but the hous is a person.


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    dotsAfterlife Created from Storiesdots
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    Fear before this day,
    Itís the last we shall have,
    On this little slice of paradise,

    The devilís coming for us,
    Calling us out to sea,
    But the world is not fit yet to parish,
    God canít seem to hear us now,

    Weíll call upon the spirits,
    Tell me my life story,
    Everything is falling down,
    ĎI canít get over dying,í

    Kill me beautifully,
    Whisper everything Iíve missed,
    Give me a lifeís meaning,
    Convince me,
    ĎItís not my time to leave,í

    It hurts so much,
    To cry beneath water,
    And right now Iím sleeping in a hollow castle,
    What kind of pet am I to you?
    Iím drowning in hymns,
    Living this out,
    Like it has a happy ending,

    Donít cry for me,
    But its still hurts to see you move on,
    Iím falling slowly,
    Caught in such a pitiful death,
    I told myself not to die,

    But Iím not one to hold up a conversation.




    Submitted on 2005-08-26 17:00:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your writing is so good that I think you might be older than you say? Maybe not but I do like it and woul love to read more of you stuff! Your going to be a great writer I can tell,but for now take life slow and injoy all you can. Don't grow up to fast. Thanks for the read and if you get a chance come read some of my stuff and tell me what you think ok?
    Kelley
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      "you are very deep,especially at such an early stage in youre life.the imagery you protrayed was excellent.this was the best feature of this write.yore depthness is going to slow peopke down on this=easilet not understandable in some of this.i say to that=no matter.
    the ending,made me smile."

    I agree with everything toyysruss said, this is fantastic, and ratiates with power, keep writing
    - Illusion
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Illusion | [ Reply to This ]
      you are very deep,especially at such an early stage in youre life.the imagery you protrayed was excellent.this was the best feature of this write.yore depthness is going to slow peopke down on this=easilet not understandable in some of this.i say to that=no matter.
    the ending,made me smile.

    one persons interpatation

    cool

    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]


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