Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: CHARMWOODdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 760
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 341



    Description:
       one of my first houses was located on charmwood ave later it was the scene of a double homicide hmmm anyway hope you like


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCHARMWOODdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Here in my darkness I am calling .
    I am falling.
    The heat in your stare helps to ruin me.
    There is no salvation from what I have become.
    What you have created.
    This prison is cold.
    I wont leave it though its all I know.
    I see you .
    Hiding , changing it into someplace I cant recognize.




    Submitted on 2005-08-26 21:36:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Well, I don't know how to start. But it sounds kind of ironic with the whole house and murder and all, but besides that great poem. It was a little short, but in a way that helped it out more. So far I'd give this poem a 8.9 out of 10. Keep the poems coming.
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    72121

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Rezar por la naturaleza written by MyPeriodical
    Chasing The Lie written by jackz
    Labor Pains written by MyPeriodical
    Scared written by MyPeriodical
    Human Progression written by ForgottenGraves
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Gone written by MyPeriodical
    One day older, One year wiser. written by Rhythmal
    A Donde Llegamos written by MyPeriodical
    Release written by robbie
    Silly Rulers. written by MyPeriodical
    Comparisons written by MyPeriodical
    Broken Promises written by S.A.M.
    I am still sorry. written by MyPeriodical
    Sanctimony written by MyPeriodical
    Untitled written by _winky_
    Quoth The Skies and its limits written by MyPeriodical
    Canalizar written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    not alone written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    To Be written by MyPeriodical
    That Kind of Love Never Brought Me Flowers written by Jazzy
    I am a sorry son. Part two written by MyPeriodical
    untitled written by MyPeriodical
    Remedies written by MyPeriodical
    Survive ed - right back at the beginning written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry