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    dots Submission Name: PARKING LOTdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       i wrote this sitting in a parking lot of a bar very drunk if i recall hehehheeh

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    dotsPARKING LOTdots

    There is something here.
    Something brittle.
    Something old.
    Your pictures dot my otherwise naked walls .
    Thoughts of you plague my naked soul.
    My dreams are no more then questions .
    Have you been ruined?
    Is this only love made hate?
    You seem colder.
    Like ice.
    Ice cold.

    Submitted on 2005-08-26 21:38:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ahh being drunk..lol..not that I've experienced that often but have unfortunately... and let me say, I think it's one of the best times to write because your so open and have so many thoughts and just don't care. Loved the poem, as I do most of your writings. I loved the end...

    You Seem Colder.
    Like ice.
    Ice Cold.

    I think that was my favorite part.. the only change I would make is than instead of then... other than that good write here...
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thet say that when you are drunk, the truth always comes out in one form or another. Given your circumstances - a very good write - Cheers !
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...maybe i dont understand it cuz you were drunk...or cuz ineed to be drunk..or i am drunk...idk...but i dont get it sorry!

    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      you bad girl(lol)depthness is here and imagery is cool
    lacking evrything else
    not important for a sophisticated rant

    just an opinion

    wes all toyysruss in florida
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]

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