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    dots Submission Name: God Complex (Simple God)dots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/515/135
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 279
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1716



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       R.I.P.-Matt Karr, Melissa Metoyer,
    and for my most recent loss,
    Rest In Peace GOD!!!

    why?


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    dotsGod Complex (Simple God)dots
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    doing dances to keep the rain from comin
    i ain't fooled in the least cuz i know who its from
    you're nothin to me
    you ain't worth me gettin on my knees
    just so you can turn your back and plow over some trees
    into my livin room,
    i made out well last nite
    but to cancel it out
    you choose to make even by blowin down my mutha fuckin house
    and my run as a Catholic is through
    how many times have i spend lookin up to you
    and prayin through hands clasped liquid glass
    here's my ass, i'll turn my cheek so you can kiss me now God
    you're my past
    boy!, does time go by fast
    when you're mad at a diety
    for lookin past my senior class, mary and me
    its not bout the dance
    its bout kids in third worlds
    its bout the girls that kill kids
    and grow men that kill the girls
    you let all this shit happen
    you're as guilty as the rapist is
    you can't hear my prayers becasue you don't know what sacred is
    i would sign some papers so you'd know i'm calling it quits
    i get offended when the masses call me catholic
    turned the water to blood, look at the lives you've taken
    you hold full responsiblity, your only son forsaken
    give me truth, patiently waitin
    panting and prayin that somehow i could someday repay you
    hannah, i promise now to swear
    there's no one to place promises on
    becasue i doubt you're God is there
    please forgive if you feed into this foolishness
    after all this time i know who the true Judas is^




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      wow pj. what's been up with u lately. u leave 4 a while, then u come back dissing God. what can change u like that? i won't knock u 4 what u believe cuz that's on u. i don't know what u've been through. i don't think u'll convince hannah though. i hope times get better 4 you.
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Form and spelling aside, it was raw and you can really feel the anger that you have towards God who seems to have betrayed you. I like the line "Its bout the girls that kill kids and grown men that kill the girls". I dont know why, it just stuck in my head when I read it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Mrs Peabody | [ Reply to This ]
      Awe to you, a work of an angry "god", an emotional bliss, pathos are amazing. I like this piece very much because I can relate to you, I had a loss, my personal friend who was murdered by the same church/religiong that I believed in. true I lost all faith but sometimes things are done for the sake of reason. Good Job, the free verse is excellent, of course ignoring grammar errosr which have nothing to do with emotional sensibilty. Even John Donne had a little error, say a semicolon? lol Anyway, I hope you're doing well and keep writing as you do.
    much Love
    Y.w.
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by YoungWerther | [ Reply to This ]



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