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    dots Submission Name: 3 Haikusdots
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    Author: srcastic1
    ASL Info:    18/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 96/97/28
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Haiku/Comedy
    Total Views: 579
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 463



    Description:
       I know you're only really supposed to put one poem up here at once, but these haikus are so short that 4 of them combined are shorter than a typical poem on here. I don't usually write these, but I actually find it sort of entertaining to come up with something witty in just 17 syllables. Also, don't try to look for a connection between poems here. There isn't one.


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    Melt-in-Your-Mouth Puzzle

    "M's" on m&m's...
    Are they stamped on? Painted on?
    Mystery to me.




    Regarding Closet Complaints

    I'm sure there's never
    Nothing to wear. For desperate
    Measures: use tin foil.


    Unfinished

    Haikus almost cramp
    My style. I have so many
    Thoughts and not enough




    Submitted on 2005-08-27 14:31:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The M&M one was the best. I think you have good potential. Perhaps you may want to work more on portraying images than just random words. Your Valentine's Day one was, as everyone else has said, not so hot. Perhaps if you wanted to continue on that line (and you should, as it is very good), you should expand it to free verse or a longer poem. Haikus just seem to limit your potential.
    Good luck and I hope I can read some more of your work soon.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by aletha_409 | [ Reply to This ]


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