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    dots Submission Name: "OMG. I heard she's pregnant!"dots
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    Author: Mrs Peabody
    ASL Info:    17/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 25/37/8
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 977
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       This poem isn't about me, but yah i'll admit I've been called a bitch among other things in my lifetime.


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    dots"OMG. I heard she's pregnant!"dots
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    she hates them all with a vicious passion
    she'd kill them all in a gracious fashion
    slit their wrists, hang them by the gut
    that will teach them for calling her a slut

    she hates them all with a burning rage
    she'd kill them all, shine up the twelve gauge
    conceive a plan of blood and gore
    that will teach them for calling her a whore

    she hates them all for what they've done
    she'd kill them all, it would be so much fun
    torture them slowly and make their skin itch
    that will teach them for calling her a bitch




    Submitted on 2005-08-27 17:31:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good release of emotion, the words are practically dripping with pent up anger. A little more gruesome than I prefer to read, but a decent job. Keep it up.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      That was awsome. I like the ryming and the realism to it. It's like, a fantasy of those who have been hated for making a simple mistake. Yeah well, I liked it keep writting.
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      the poem is quite honest, anyone would feel that way if they were in that situation. and you chose the right words to express those feelings i realli like it, keep up the gr8 work ~agz
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by irish_fairy1018 | [ Reply to This ]
      the poem is quite honest, anyone would feel that way if they were in that situation. and you chose the right words to express those feelings i realli like it, keep up the gr8 work ~agz
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by irish_fairy1018 | [ Reply to This ]
      its harsh, but i like it...i have a couple of friends that got pregnant young and they went throught the same thing and felt the same way...i really liked how you put the rhymes together it was awesome...keep up the good work...
    **KeLLe**
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this poem is harsh, and it is horrible that things like this happen in reality, poeple are always judging without knowing. this is a great write i wouldn't change anything about it
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by JGo | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this poem is harsh, and it is horrible that things like this happen in reality, poeple are always judging without knowing. this is a great write i wouldn't change anything about it
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by JGo | [ Reply to This ]
      Clevery written and you handled a difficult rhyme very well. I think the person (if any) you are reffering to, would thank you for penning such words on her behalf. I enjoyed reading this - a well constructed piece.
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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