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    dots Submission Name: Inner Glowdots

    Author: WandWielder
    ASL Info:    21-f-maryland
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 55/62/16
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Writen 4-22-99, when i was 16 for a poetry contest for inspiration. I came in second that year. This was one of the last poems i wrote before taking a long break from writing.

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    dotsInner Glowdots

    The light shined
    Bright and luminescent
    Seeming to have a never ending heart
    Forever going source
    But yet small and quiet
    Sweet and soothing
    Sound was in operant
    But yet there
    Not shrill yet not low
    Hardly heard by the ear
    Seeming to come from no where
    But yet has to have a source
    Where is it?
    Is it right, left?
    Straight forward?
    A slow realization
    The source
    The glowing and forever delightful sound
    Was coming slowly from with in
    Self, the heart, inside
    This was the source
    The essence was my own soul
    And light
    It was my dreams and the cause of ambition
    Let it shine.

    Submitted on 2005-08-27 20:10:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey. I really liked this. I guess im not really used to reading poems that dont rhyme like I usually write. I just wrot emy first poem without rhyming and I guess it's ok. But I thought this was good. I got a good image when reading it. I had no clue at first what it was talking about. A lot of poems you can figure out what it is about when you first start to read i or from the title itself. Good job. -james
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]
    Very inspiring poem of the self. This sort of source thing wondering from the external place before you actually look for what is within. Interesting. That was really long ago. How do you feel about it now?

    To be honest, because of the punctuation and the fact that there are no line breaks leaves me off track a wondering all over the place. You do have the question marks but what happened to the rest? How am i to know when to stop and take a break or when am i suppose to keep going? Sometimes, people do say that it is not important. How can it not be important if without it, people won't be able to read the piece correctly. Take that in consieration.

    I know you are talking about a source. But it has to lead from one point to the next and in order for that to happen, you might need line breaks and even punctuation. And you don't have that here. so i'm asking you how you feel about it now? Do u still read it the same way as before or do you see it from a new perspective?

    I think this piece, although quite commone has a lot of words of wisdom in it even if the words are a bit simple yet still, it's inspiring to read and to keep in mind.

    Keep writing and take care. Peace...Irina
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]

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