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    dots Submission Name: Dear, Any Morbid Yoredots

    Author: azeremen12
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 46/65/27
    Words: 330
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       It's me begging a person I love very dearly. (Her name is in the title)

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    dotsDear, Any Morbid Yoredots

    Going to college, that's all her lifes been for.
    Grades equal scholarships, sholarships equal money, she's knocked on everyone's door.
    But won't she be in for a surprise,
    when she finds theres more problems in life,
    than reaching a college campus door.

    Still won't listen, she says her minds made up.
    She says thats been her goal, and nothing else will ever be enough.
    Please don't chastise with your lies,
    your uncertain and theres no reply,
    finding a path is really not gonna be enough.

    Double headed demons, she doesn't notice their presence.
    They've promised prosperity, but in turn their smoking her essence.
    She's beautiful, but she's become a ghoul,
    so caught up in the journey for a good school,
    though now she has no essence.

    I try to explain, though she keeps shrugging me off,
    just live your life, let happiness produce smiles though money's getting soft.
    I'm confused and she's so indirect,
    she struggles, carving holes through her chest,
    though teasing, saying "your getting soft."

    She's gambling, torture for future happiness,
    all the faces tell her after reading her life on paper, their impressed.
    She refuses to feel love at it's start,
    this torture is coming apart,
    her eyes have a smoother feel, I'm impressed.

    Live to work, telling Jesus to wait for her awhile,
    he knows its a dead end but responds with a wave and a smile.
    Melancholy, such a tormented soul,
    illusions have her trapped in a hole,
    visions of prosperity have robbed her smle.

    Oh! Diamond studded papers are clearly the earth to her moon,
    walks closer to them, knowing they produce the subtle reak of doom.
    Who am I to say anything to her?
    It's clear from her F.I.U labeled shirt,
    that she welcomes the ideals of her doom.

    She's solid, she knows where to go,
    says I'm lost, that I put on a show,
    my screams will always remain,
    "No! I will never let go!"

    Submitted on 2005-08-27 22:11:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well since the others seem to know whats going on it must be just me that really doesnt understand all of this but i think ive got it now. when i was reading this it did seem to drag on but when i finished it i decided it might be just long enough but im still not sure. and i dont see where her name is. unless im just blind and its probably sitting right in front of me. o wait i think i see it now. is it damy??? cuz i see each word in the title is capitalized and does spell damy. thats an interesting name. but anyways this was good overall now that ive looked this over i think i get it now.:-)

    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it! It's just so true on so many levels! Please Keep writing! also is her name Damy? Great write. i love how its a poem but its like im reading a stoyr at the same time.
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Widget | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it! very touching, quite long though lol, i was seeing words everywhere after i finnished, lol anyhow, keep up the gr8 work, im loving it ~ag
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by irish_fairy1018 | [ Reply to This ]

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