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    dots Submission Name: unoriginal poemdots

    Author: musclebound350
    ASL Info:    26/male
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 197/202/70
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just odd how some say that your work is "unoriginal" I guess to me this is how I feel about it. I guess me explaining original and unoriginal. hope you like it. If not, well cant please everyone. Thanks to LameMansTerms for the help on the last stanza. Sounds a lot better now.

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    dotsunoriginal poemdots

    You try to write something original
    But how exactly can you do that
    what way can I tell something
    that exemplifies that

    original are the words you speak
    the ideas you come to find
    you write about your feelings
    what pops into your mind

    each mind is unique
    our thoughts are not the same
    we each express differently
    life is all just a game

    tired of the un-originality
    that people mark on our words
    everyone is original
    to say not is so absurd

    critique this as you wish
    good or bad
    but this is original
    my words are all I have.

    Submitted on 2005-08-28 01:38:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes indeed! I couldn't agree more than I do! This is a great poem! Speaks volumes very loud and clear! I always wonder how people can leave comments saying you should have written it this way or that way and pick the poem apart. It leaves you wanting to tell them, 'ya know if I were you I would have written it the way you would have written it'! HA! This is good stuff and I love the fact that you wrote a poem about it! Great great great! Did I say great??! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      hey! you are unique ... and this is most definitely original!

    ...and this writing can be a good form of catharsis so keep it going! J
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey James,
    This is the most original work i've read for the day...lol
    I so totally agree with you. a lot of people say how unoriginal the things we write are our thoughts and our words expressed through a paper. The ideas may be commone but it's the way we write it and how we write something whether it be from a new perspective or old.

    I do say sometimes, that the piece does sound common but i never say it's unoriginal.

    Good write...loved it. Take care...Peace...Irina
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the best I have read from you. it isn't drawn out or represented with a tear next to it, this is a real poem. And a pretty clever one at that. The title drew me in and then yes it is what it was-very original and it flowed well.One sugestion and take it or leave it but in your last stanza:
    critique this as you may
    original or not
    these words come from my mouth
    what I say cannot be taught
    [I know you were rhyming with not but--....it just isn't that good--it also doesn't make too much sense because sure it can be taught..anything can if it is understood..ya know? anyway that;s all/real solid/I like the new style-stick with it and I will be reading more.
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i think this is the most unique poem yet. its like writing about writing. jejeje sounds silly but i think its great that u can express the way that u feel about what others comment in this form. hope that people can understand and appreciate ur talent. laters guy.
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]

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