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    dots Submission Name: I Could Kiss u Goodbye Foreverdots
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    Author: Naymless
    ASL Info:    15/F/phx, az
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 142/110/33
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 722
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 977



    Description:
       Well to be honest it just some late night ramblings.


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    dotsI Could Kiss u Goodbye Foreverdots
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    I canít blame this world any longer,
    Iíve come to realize,
    I live with the same cruelty,

    And for that,
    I will take my needs to the ground,
    And I will take my time to apologize,
    I wonít deny my own humanity,
    My mistakes keep me on my toes,
    I could fall at any moment,
    And I might not get back up,

    I would bathe in my humility,
    Only to prove,
    Maybe...
    My tears mean something this time,

    If I took a blade to my wrist,
    Never would my mind wonder,
    About saving myself once more,
    The voices in my head might stop,
    But not the ones who tell me,
    ĎThereís no proper way to kill yourself,
    With dignity,í

    To be honest I want to die with a bullet to the head,
    So no one want to see me one last time,
    Iíll tell the world why Iím so afraid,

    I hate my own reflection.




    Submitted on 2005-08-28 02:59:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ramblings? This was real good stuff! I love the last line! It put this whole poem in perspective. Great write.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn... That was deep... I feel lost in it. It was very good. VERY. It's lyke you took a Polaroid of your pain... So many great lynes in there too! Colour me impressed as all Hel...
    Peace, love and robots eating meat-

    ~#6~
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      well first of all i couldnt pass this one by cus there were no views and no comments, so i had to check it out.. for being late night ramblings theyre dam good rambles :) i like it.. my favorite part is
    The voices in my head might stop,
    But not the ones who tell me,
    ĎThereís no proper way to kill yourself,
    With dignity,í

    i'm not sure why.. but the last part of that section just rings soo true.. there is no way to kill your self and still be respected for who you were, which really kind of annoys me because if someone commits suicide they are damned for it and people lose respect and think that it was purely them.. like no outside force had an impact on it.. anyway i'll quit MY late night ramblings and this is really good
    i'm going to read some more of yours now, i really like your concepts and such
    peace
    danielle
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      A good way to see things in a cynical sense
    lol. Nay, I like the way you put your visions to work, interesting and straightforward. You should, however, love yourself, you're an essential part of this world like everyone else. I know that you can be loved and are loved by many. Appreciate what you have you can see most blind people cannot, you can hear most deaf people wish that, you can articulate things correctly and you're poetic and most people wish to posses that. someone loves you, your not alone, give time and yourself some pace and you'll find yourself to be complacent with life's whims; while you laugh at it. The poem is good and its sincere from a teen's fragile heart, try to make sense of life, after all you only live once.
    Yours Truly, you can count on me
    Alexis
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by YoungWerther | [ Reply to This ]


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