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    dots Submission Name: We Giggledots
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    Author: painofthanatos
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684/571/86
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Really, Really, REALLY old poem...


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    dotsWe Giggledots
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    Today I flirted with *your man*
    You spent the class period typing. searching. ignoring.
    We Giggled. We Laughed.
    He looked into my eyes
    He remembered
    He looked away and coughed
    He looked at me
    Making sure I saw his hand cover yours
    You pushed it away - He looked confused.
    He spaced. I spaced.
    In unison we said the book in front of us
    Was written by two Carols.
    A Carol and a Carole.
    We giggled.
    Those same nervous giggles we exchanged after our first kiss
    I said I dont want you back
    And I mean it...kinda
    It's just that sometimes I miss your kiss
    I miss you holding me so tight I feared I'd break
    I miss you whispering in my ear that you loved me so much
    And I could feel that you meant it...
    But as I miss you
    As you Remember
    We Giggle
    And she writes...oblivious to us
    And when your hand rests on my leg
    I don't push it away
    I look at her and I think *Now What?*




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      This poem is well written and flows well. It expresses a story often felt by many and so it is relatable. I have one question do or did you ever go to Central Regional High School.
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by BigRed | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good write
    You showed us your readers how one can refind Love once they have given up on it
    A lot of people think once you give up on a love thats it
    That is so not true
    I really liked this
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me giggle a little bit. I like it very much. Chemistry after a break up. I feel sorry for the other girl though...I hope she's either really stupid or just not a nice person because I wouldn't want something like that to happen to a nice girl. Anyway, that was fun. oh, btw, I know ASL TOO!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by hushedhavoc | [ Reply to This ]
      man. this piece kicked total ass. i love the end. now what. thats what i think about everything. i get stoned, drunk, i get a boyfriend, we brak up, i get good grades, i get bad grades, i always end up thinking now what. this seems like an awkward awkward position to be in. once my friend told me she really liked this guy and so i went to talk to him about it but he thought i was hitting on him and we ended up kissing.. stuff like that is so awkward.
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]
      Last line...here needs to be her.

    This was a rather devious piece. I mean, your friends man? LMFAO! GO girl! Do what you do! LOL

    Why am I laughing? Because...this is the reason why I am like...no females are in my corner! Stay away from MY MAN! LOL

    This was a unique piece of work here. And I did in fact really like it!

    Great job!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is kinda cute in it's own right. It's so hard when it used to be, to see them with someone new. You have to wonder what to do when you both want to be with the other to a point. Either way, this was a nice little rmemberance piece!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Alright, I figured it out, you write like right in the moment... to where everything comes together and makes sense, you write in great vivid detail... that is sweet

    and I love how you say "we giggled" it heightens the poem so much... this is an awesome piece, I NEVER lost interest, you are so awesome at writing... YOU never stop

    Keep em comin

    Codee
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]


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