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    dots Submission Name: A fateful deathdots

    Author: WandWielder
    ASL Info:    21-f-maryland
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 55/62/16
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsA fateful deathdots

    Winter morn, noon or night
    I think on thee
    Your plight to hang on to mine black heart
    To seek shelter in the bosom that held you once
    Pain and udder helpless confusion
    Through time and patients wait
    Seeing not, thine own heart and mine true to future times
    Darkness a void between us
    Mine short and pessimistic life clouded
    With pain and mournful crime
    Thine a true and good heart
    I fear to quell the fire there
    And so my love I take my leave
    My heart from yours
    Flees from sanctity
    Darkness for thine becomes true day
    As shadows creep and cover mine
    I love thou well but I must flee
    Good day my love
    Good night to me

    Submitted on 2005-08-28 14:55:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a beautiful and old-fashioned expression of true love. When you love someone enough to let them go, because you realize that you are not what is best for them, for whatever reason. To walk away from love in the best interest of another is very heroic indeed, and the most unselfish thing a person could do.
    I enjoyed reading this very much...cher
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cool becasue I could relate to it. The way you put it out didn't impress me too much, but I could totally understnad what you mean. This had a really cool Shakespeare or even Keats kind of feel to it, just in the way that you've said some stuff. It was kind of classy, but in a slightly different way. I've kind of been through feeling this way, I've learned the hard way that you can't let your other emotions cloud your judgement. And besides, if you're really meant to be with someone, they will come back to you. And even though I know I love someone right now, I know that I have to run in order to figure out some things. And if they really love me, they will still be there.

    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      instantly the old-star far-flung language appeals to me. the constant inversion not so much, but i suppose it is stylistic. reminded me at once of milton, if he ever wrote love poems, so appraisal there is deserved. but there's no punctuation. not even a full stop. even milton had full stops at the end of his convoluted sentences. i love the punching ending though. round it off perfectly.
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by infernal_rose | [ Reply to This ]

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