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    dots Submission Name: Mistakesdots
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    Author: shmuzzelle
    ASL Info:    20/girl/canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 261/134/30
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 267
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       I am so slowly learning this. It is a painful process, and hopefully I'll be who I want to be when I'm done.


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    One by one the wrinkles will appear
    One for every dream, love, hardship, mistake
    Nearly every experience ever had
    Constant reminders of what was, wanted,
    Destroyed, or abandonned
    For everyone to see
    A once youthful person is slowly
    Destroyed by their actions, their decisions
    Impossible to hide from life, one will make errors
    Some can be corrected and others
    Must be left to evolve for themselves
    Each experience determining the next to follow
    Karma always gets us in the end
    Impossible to erase our mistakes
    Cannot replace leaving behind our dreams
    And settling for second best




    Submitted on 2005-08-28 17:28:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is incredibly pessimistic! As a "downer" work of art, it works very well. The thought of a depressed person come through very clear. I like it a lot on a literary level.

    As a statement of life, it's troubling. I don't generally share a pessimistic view of the world, so I don't agree with the statements. I want to give you a pat on the back and say "Cheer up!"

    Steve


    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, Karma does have a way of coming back to us. Sometimes in a good way, others not. It's true that some mistakes cannot be undone or taken back, so to speak, but you can only hope to learn from those. I find, usually, that there is more good in people, than bad, and so there are more good works and examples of kindness given, than bad. Karma is not judgemental, it is a state of fairplay, fate if you will, which we all must face eventually. cher
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad.. well since I believe in God I think if you couldn't have what u yearn and try very hard for.. its for the best or maybe its for u to learn u from.. to not do another mistake in the future... God is my friend... Iw ill always try and remeber that.. cause when you don't things seem to cripplle be4 u.. slowly fading

    Write on :D short on time cant give more comment sry
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]



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