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    dots Submission Name: Blankdots

    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    im an empty peice of paper you try to read me but you cant.my edges are witherd and curled over from 15 years that hacve seemlessly passed me by.a gust of wind rushes in and blows me away.people watch me as i drift by going nowhere with no one.no one reaches out for me or tries to hold on to me.i land on the road in the middle of nowhere the sun wearing me away as time goes by.a car rushes past and a tree pearces me where my heart should be.i sit and i wait but no one evers comes for me.

    Submitted on 2005-08-28 19:01:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awww this is sad... I felt that way before... everyone saw what i was going through but nobody stepped in to help or to stop from what i was doing... i liked its visuals and i can see clearly what you meant... thanks for this piece... keep writting
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this. Every word is so pretty. I know what youre saying, and you said it perfectly. This is my idea of flawless. You are really talented. Definitely a favorite. I cant compliment this enough, but I think you get the point... so I'll just shut up now Great job

    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      i see a girl lost in the wind
    i grab her so she doesn't fly again
    won't let her slip
    hold her hand tight in my grip
    walking in the eye of the storm
    remember we all cry when we're born
    forget the sun, i'll be ur shade
    cuz i'm ur friend this isn't a cherade

    hey i know akaila's there 4 u. u got me too. don't forget babe. ya'll trip me out with how sad you 2 become sometimes. but everybody goes through hard times. keep ur head up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      how sad for u! i still love u gena! and im not just gonna let u just be blown away cuz who would i talk to! anyway good job and thanks for commenting on all my poems!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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