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    dots Submission Name: Incensedots

    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       just a moment in the moment.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Confused and still seeking a purpose.
    The mind is winding down as the incense burns on.
    Nirvana is still playing that sad song.
    Sipping my coffee and enjoying this lost consciousness.
    Life canít be too much better then this.

    Submitted on 2005-08-28 23:01:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one
    To me it reflects the time one needs to themselves
    I like you use music to relax
    The smell of the incense is a very powerful relaxer
    I use it a lot to
    a Very good write with a good message
    Take some time out of the day for yourself and relax
    Take Care

    And Thank You for your recent comments I very much appreciate it

    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      nice Felicia sounds like a restful peaceful moment one away from the battle of life sort of a coffee break in the middle chaos. we need those times to unwind and gather our thoughts regroup if you will. what better what than sipping coffee and listening to nirvana, lovely,
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaahhhh...an early morning relaxing moment. I like those times and this was a simple reminder of them.

    This was just peaceful to me and I lost myself in the moment you were describing. Well done. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      i beg to differ, life can get better. got frontstage for The Black Crows and Tom Petty, the were burning all night long. now that's chill.
    makes me want to light one up myself.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      A moment huh, kind of makes more sense when you point that out. You know what this reminds me of? The guy on the Maxell tapes, you know where he's sitting in the arm chair and the music from the stero system is slowly blowing him away. Well just to let you know, I really enjoyed every word of this poem, and I'd give it a 9.2 out of 10. Keep the poems comming.
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
      really nice, but you did post it four times. o.o you may want to delete it, and post it just once. give others a bit of room on the front page, ye'know? Very nice write though.
    ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      lol well the name of the poem attracted me and usually i dont like short poems because people can't pull them off but i was glad to see that you're one of the skilled few that can. i particularly loved the use of incence in this piece...it pulled me in and made me feel the moment because i've been in it and know exactly how it feels. very good job.

    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by icaughtfire591 | [ Reply to This ]

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