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    dots Submission Name: Princess Harlotdots

    Author: Chihuahuii
    ASL Info:    16/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 75/90/36
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       A middle-of-the-night poem about a girl who only feels fulfilled when in the arms of a man. (Any man.)

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    dotsPrincess Harlotdots

    Something is pulling me,
    Stroking my kitten's back with a master's palm,
    Telling me, "go on, go on."

    But I, the cowardly princess,
    Stand in my sin that reeks like shit
    And the fumes bleed into my lacy black skirt.
    But I smile,
    'cuz my shit's contagious, baby.

    The attention, I love it,
    All the men I attract with the catty harlot ways
    That I detest, and I condemn,
    'til the night so soaks my eyes
    That I'm forced to wipe them clean
    With a dirty stinky napkin my man of the moment
    Probably released on!

    I hate myself, I love my hair,
    My eyes, my piano-player fingers
    That slip and stroke so cleanly on the tan bedsheets
    When I lay lost in dreams,
    Hiding out until I see my inevitable
    Fate with my own eyes. Unfortunate
    For me, this is all I see:
    A dying me,
    If the princess fails to flee
    From the masked hatred of many,
    Many men.

    So happy would the princess be,
    If maybe she,
    Her heart ablaze with affection and warmth,
    Would realize one day and say,
    "Well hey, you know?
    I guess my shit does stink."

    Submitted on 2005-08-29 00:36:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very insightful for a 15yr old. You should be proud.
    The only thing I can think to critique would maybe watch punctuation, in some spots it's a bit hard to read.
    Other than that, I think this is a great write. Keep it up.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you're 15? i mean i don't know what to say. Really there is nothing wrong with it. the pattern is almost flawless, the meaning is constantly pounding you like your princess i'm sure knows. The violents in the words is metaphor to her helter skelter nights. this is truly a awesome piece. And maybe i can just relate because i got my heart wrapped in barbwire and tried to find love where only tears and sweat live. Great piece.

    Semper Fidelis,
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]

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