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    dots Submission Name: Eternaldots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 692
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       Just feelings outpouring in some way besides the typical, "I love you but you don't love me anymore" stuff that I do lately. I love him so very much.


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    I love the way your smile
    Reaches the depths of your eyes.
    I love the way you crawl into my bed,
    And take me by surprise.
    I love the way your perfect lips
    Turn up into a smile.
    I love the way you can live without me,
    But only for a little while.
    I love the way you look at me,
    As if I'm the only one.
    I love the chemistry that has been between us
    From the moment that this has begun.
    I love the way you touch my face,
    And the way that you kiss my lips.
    I love the way my heart beats faster
    When I hear someone say Flip.
    I love the way your body feels.
    I love the smell of your skin.
    I love the way you make me cry,
    But then make me smile again.
    I love lying in your arms
    And listening to your heart.
    I'll love you till the end of time,
    Cause I've loved you from the start.




    Submitted on 2005-08-29 08:36:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pretty well written, except that in one of your lines you put, " From the moment that this has begun". It would have flowed more evenly if you had put, "from the moment it had begun". Well it was very touching...good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      Full of passion, emotion and love. Lovely words well written and I enjoyed reading it very much. I am not going to pick flies - enough to say it was very good.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      The images a reader gets when reading this poem is overwhelming. The imagery you use is very in depth on terms of passion for the reader. At times the rhyme loses its rhythm but it tends to get back on track later in the poem...Overall good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by unforgiving05 | [ Reply to This ]


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