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    dots Submission Name: One Last Timedots

    Author: heather_
    ASL Info:    15
    Elite Ratio:    2.53 - 33/28/14
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsOne Last Timedots

    My eyes are filling with tears
    This is what i've wanted to do for years upon years
    I look around one last time
    Trapped in my world, not speaking a word, as quiet as a mime
    This time picking up the knife comes easily
    But i better hurry morning will be comming soon and mother will be waking, as the nights getting breezy
    I take the knife in my hand and drag it vertically on my skin
    I guess this time i cant win
    Its just deep enough, finially im leaving this place
    Forget me, please no sympathy i've been waiting for this day, forget my face
    Watching the blood splatter onto the floor,
    I think to myself one last time this is what i've been waiting for.

    Submitted on 2005-08-29 10:47:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great write! I can totally relate. I love your word usage to. Everything was awesome flow, wording... You are a truly awesome poet. Keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]
      "What a gutless thing to do-kill yourself-no concern for family or friends-just hack away with a knife because nobody loves or understands you. [censored], what a spoilt little brat. Christ if you had any sense or class you would use a gun (borrowed from one of your non friends) warm the barrel in hot water, put it in your mouth and bang away at your pityless cowardly brain.-Great write-the obituary I mean-
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]

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