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    dots Submission Name: Storybook Roaddots

    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
    Total Views: 1265
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       For Dave....hyproglo....

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsStorybook Roaddots

    I used to live in the city,
    But I moved to Storybook Road.
    I liked the change of scenery,
    And the stories that were told.

    The brick house on the corner,
    Thatís where the Little Pigs Live.
    The bad wolf visited just yesterday,
    But the house still wouldnít give.

    Do you see that cozy cottage?
    The one up on the hill?
    Jack got tired of breaking his crown,
    So he moved there with Jill.

    Oh, Little Red Riding Hood,
    Yes, she lives here too!
    She just moved next door,
    To the Little Olí Lady in the Shoe.

    Old McDonalds Farm,
    Is about a mile away.
    He married Old Mother Hubbard.
    And together they now stay.

    Then in that mansion,
    Stays Old King Cole.
    I hear him every morning,
    Calling for his pipe and bowl.

    The Cow that jumps over the moon,
    Lives here with the Cat and the Fiddle.
    They are such dear friends of mine,
    Iíve known them since I was little.

    Well I guess it's time to go,
    Itís near the time to sleep.
    I still have to call Little Boy Blue,
    To help Bo Peep find her sheep.

    Goodbye and thanks for visiting!

    Submitted on 2005-08-29 11:02:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Major Skills! This was so beautiful. Wow, I was like how did she do that? This is definately a Fav now of mine, I just happened to come across it seeing as someone else's fav, ( Doris Jean). You took a few fairytales and made something new. Perfect! Just perfect.

    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This challenge was probably the most tried. Everyone has a different slant and it's awesome. I cant believe how many people wrote. This was just great. I smiled all the way through. LiLi, you done good here. Your rhymes were perfect and it all went together well. Congrats on a job well done.
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was fabulous! Everyone has done a fantastic job with this challenge...however this one was probably one of my favorite ones. This really took me back to being a kid and it was just so adorable! There was a lot of thought put into this piece and I really enjoyed it! I couldn't help but smile while I was reading it and I think I'll read this one to my kids tonight before they go to bed! Thanks so much for posting this!
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      very cute. I like your traditional theme with this, certainly a far cry from my own. Mother Goose I think was a friend to all of us, and we've all been on that road at least once...love how you set up the neighborhood, I could imagine it...I like the bit about Jack and Jill moving to the top of the hill. Bout time they did that.
    ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      LiLi - excellent write! I think you hit all my favorite mother goosers...and I enjoyed how you put them in the neighborhood together

    All the posts to this have been well done, but this one is a true tribute to the storybook...
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have been reading a ffew of the Storybook Road challenges and I have to say this is the best one I have read yet. In fact I like it so much I am going to favorite it so it will be there handy for me to read again.
    Fantastic job!
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehe this was great Li Li! I find it a swich from what you are normally writing. Thats great. I like how they all kind of like come together ya kno waht i mean? This really was very interesting. Great job...well i'm off to read your other post :-)

    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Li LI, It's me again. We have to stop meeting like this. Well, I see you regressed from the erotic tigress
    to little Bo Peep! LOL

    Well, like the other commentors the way you took StoryBook Road and turned into the habitat of evey childrens fairy tales was quite wonderful and creative. I loved the rhyme as well!

    Nice job, NO GREAT JOB!!

    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Jeez, Li Li, I just gave Dave a big rap for his, and now you lay this absolute BEWDY on me!
    Very neatly done, dear, dragging all the rhyme characters in it and describing each habitat, and making it funny too,,,

    What a delightful piece.


    Now, how am I gunna top that???

    Excellent work, no, excellent PLUS!

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      well isn't that just the sweetest lil thang! honestly that was just too darn cute!

    nice little switch up from your norm...now i'm off to read wacky dave's :D
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      This was just lovely!
    I really enjoyed how to take all those timeless characters and make them somehow seem real. Very cool. This is a great piece. I'm so going to comment hell with this. Oh well, way it goes.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      That was neat, how they all intertwined and are living in a community. Very cool maynard. I liked how you finally put them all together, cuz they were just hangin about and we all knew they would be getting together someday having neighborhood yard sales and barbeques, HA! Very entertaining Li Li! Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      That was so wonderful...everything mingling together and finally mother Hubbard has someone to spend her life with...I always thought farmer McDonald was lonely on that big farm all by himself.lol

    Well I enjoyed this very much, great stuff!

    Until next read,

    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      how very entertaining! i like how you wove all the stories we know into your poem and have them living with each other and helping each other out.. very creative! i too have a Storybook Road... the challenge seems to be spreading!

    well done!

    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This was just too cute for words! I loved the whole thing...absolutely marvelous! As I was reading, I pictured the little neighborhood in a cartoon like picture just like in the little kids story books. GREAT JOB!
    Another one to add to my favorites list.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]

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