I've read most of your poems, I wanted to get a feel of your writing before I commented on this piece. Your writing is simlar to mine, in that you write on a spiritual level. I like your style and the depth of your writing. In this piece you are showing two sides of yourself the deceptive "devilsh" side which you clearly see. The other side shows one of love, in which you don't want to see the other person destroyed by your nature. So in the end you might not turn out so bad. I enjoyed it. lynn
why no punctuation? i think this screams for puncutation. what confused me is the moral stance your narration was meant to have been taken. here is a predative character whose lust is destructive and cruel. yet he is giving his victim a chance to run... why? there's no clear motive...or is it another bid for deceptive charm? the message is misleading and blurry. there's also a couple of mis-spellings.
Submission Name: Warning - Run
