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    dots Submission Name: Within the Pages ~ Agesdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is one I started at the river -

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    dotsWithin the Pages ~ Agesdots
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    There was a Sage
    within the page~
    agez of the books

    Hiding with the crannies
    camouflaged amongst
    the nooks...

    ...Nooks and crannies
    sheltered time
    Hidden within reason
    sense and rhyme

    Rhyming me a story
    woven of truth
    covering lies
    Sheltered and hidden
    it dies

    Dyes the sunrise
    and the sunset
    If we didn't remember
    how can we forget?





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      Okay, I don't fully get it. But it sounded damn good as I read it out loud. It flowed just right. And it made you think. I think you were saying we can't ever lose our past through nature and books. No matter how much they age. That's what I get from it. Good job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Looks like your trip to the river done you a lot of good. Nooks and crannies - I remember them well. An inspired write I am sure.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      At first I didnt like it. But I read it over again and ended up liking it a bit better. Is different.
    I liked how you ended and began with the same word, but meaning somthing else. Was ok.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      Here is what i am getting from this.

    The things that lie within the pages of a book or life that matters can mold a person outlook on things.
    A surprise awaits in every turn of the page.
    I am not real sure if I am colse but this is what i get from this.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]


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