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    dots Submission Name: Butterflydots
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    Author: AmandaLyn
    ASL Info:    18/F/ Centralia
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 292/292/42
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 231
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 554



    Description:
       this is more than what it seems, it's not really about a butterfly, think about the symbolism. :)


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    dotsButterflydots
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    Butterfly,
    why
    do you cry?

    when you fly
    on wings of silk
    you flutter and float,
    where do you go?

    where do you sleep at night?
    Can you ever rest from flight?

    Butterfly
    why
    do you cry?

    you have no home,
    but you are free.
    You have no family,
    but you are free to be what you want to be.
    you have no responsibilty
    but you have no one there for you.

    I know
    why
    you cry.




    Submitted on 2005-08-29 15:01:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it couldn't be more accurate...

    when this fleeting life is past, will you have made a journey or just fluttered here and there for no purpose?

    good poem...good imagery...nice ;)
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree i think the way the words are, and i don't see ne thing wrong with it, it perfectly written and needs to corrections. great write
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by withblindedeyez | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very sweet way to put
    that you really should
    be happy with
    what
    you
    hv
    I
    Really like the way you
    made the lines
    progress
    and
    digress
    later,
    Conqueror
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with everyone else.. I can't critique it. I see nothing wrong. I think this was very well written and I loved the symbolism. Very sweet and delicate... gentle yet proud.. I like it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cute and pretty ...i felt as if this question is being put to yourself ...?.isnt 't it?...love the way ...you use
    Butterfly ?
    why do you cry?..
    reminds me of a small little beautiful but sad creature...shedding tears ...:)


    Its a very pretty Poem.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good.
    Very good symblism ( i can't spell that).
    the flow was great and the rythm was good.
    well i don't know what else to say hope hear from you and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      this was vey delicate in the way you could put any picture to this poem and to me that is fantastic the reades will all see what they want to see
    well done
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]



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