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    dots Submission Name: The Shadows Always listendots
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    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    18/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 165/192/40
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsThe Shadows Always listendots
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    Together there, beneath the trees
    in the dark, warm night
    Holding me in your strong arms
    the only time thats right

    The shadows copy all our moves
    they see our every lie
    the shadows are the ones that see
    us gazing at the sky

    They whisper of our loving touch
    they whisper of our kiss
    they whisper of our long clasped hands
    they see what others miss

    The shadows are the ones who know
    they are the only trace
    the shadows are the only ones
    to see the soft embrace

    I know they keep it to themselves,
    all the things theyve heard
    I know that all those lovers' shadows
    won't say a single word

    So when you think your the only two
    who know the secrets hidden
    just look up there upon the wall
    the shadows always listen




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      The title of this poem is intriguing, and the poem is a delight! This is a delicious, whimsical tale of lovers and "The Shadows"! When I was a yougster, there was a popular radio program titled "The Shadow", and the theme was "the Shadow knows"!!!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Kool, romanctic, yet dark. I liked this write.

    The shadows knows. lol.
    This was a very interesting write, and I would like to add it to my fav's list.

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    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem, it just seems to hit a personal note. I can almost feel something watching as I read this. Almost like just on the edge of being found out, but not quite. Balancing on the razors edge, so to speak. Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by bgmullet | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought your rhyming was first class and everything flowed really well. If only shadows could tell their story - what a tale that would be ! Really good write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this one and by reading the title it gave me an idea for a write, very differant but yea thats a good thing right? of coarse... anyway liked it alot and am going to add to my favs... thanks for the read
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree. it was almost romantic to the point of annoying me (i am just not romantic) but the shadows that the poems focused on gave it the metaphorical darkness it needed.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]
      this was pretty cool. Despite being a romantic poem, it had kind of a dark gothic feel to it. I like that. Good job, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]


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