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    dots Submission Name: the Story PART 2dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsthe Story PART 2dots
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    I gotta story to tell
    it has a moral as well
    starts with a girl, like the Ideal kind
    the model types that ain't done shit, the ones that'are hard find
    like you look at her ass, and man you just wanna hug it
    and people understand that, because they know that you love it

    and when you hit it like, "Pap!"
    it makes her stick her ass out and "slap!"
    and when you smoke together, it's like ectasy
    the nirvana in the air gots her next to me
    but she gets used to so much she moves on to the other
    now she doing meth and its all on you
    now what the fuck I'm gonna do
    don't wanna leave her alone because it's her I love
    if not for me, when she died she would have rose above




    Submitted on 2005-08-29 21:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm..thats cute but weird but like kool at the same time..i cant really explain it tho! lol! it was hott tho..ur sh!t is always hott! lol! great jobs hun!l8r-

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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