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    dots Submission Name: Few More Timesdots
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    Author: k.o.malley
    ASL Info:    28/female/seattle
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 50/66/30
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 220
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1263



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       I think it is really obvious what this is about, maybe yto obvious..


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    Scratched bleeding hands, slightly sore from the night before.
    Stupid smile, silly smirk, feeling a little guilty. but not really.
    Thinking of a few, thinking of you, thinking that the good ones are bad too.
    Maybe now I can smile your way when I see you.

    Extension of a kiss, forceful touch, a push, a shove, and then it comes,
    Eager bodies that know no ending, they just seem to keep coming.
    Breathlessly I beg for the night to stay, I beg the light of day to stay hidden away.
    Maybe now I can look at you straight in the face.

    Hold me, choke me, tighter, but softly, sleep falls far behind me.
    Pray you don't wonder why, keep winding you up so I still feel high.
    Show me you are a little stronger, a little wiser, a little better then I had wondered.
    Maybe now I can forget you are a liar.

    Day breaks anxiously, I'm anxious to break away too.
    A long good-bye leads me to you; with a kiss and a smile you suggest I stay a while.
    And I suppose I don’t need to leave just yet,
    Since I see we both have these feelings, without regret.
    Maybe now I can forgive myself, for wanting you like this.






    Submitted on 2005-08-30 00:27:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, you are right. This one speakes for itself. So much honest and pure energy here.
    This was great. Thanks for the visual.

    Great write

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmmmm - so so good! Why do you not get more comments on your writes??? Tsk. This had sexy passion and a dark edge rolled into one. Loved the way you corrected yourself midflow, with some biting honesty - great lines like -
    'feeling a little guilty. but not really.
    Thinking of a few, thinking of you,'
    And my personal fav - 'Breathlessly I beg for the night to stay, I beg the light of day to stay hidden away.'
    This is a longshot, but is it about a girl who cheats on the guy she loves with other guys because he cheats on her too, so she can be ... equal? (if thats the right word) when shes with him? Either way, its going in my favourites, and maybe more people will discover your great writes - so please keep it up, I dont want to stop reading.
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Von Django | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there.

    I really adore the intensity of this piece. It's got a certain sting to it, just enough to be highly intriguing and to keep the reader on edge. You also seem to keep to simplicity with this peice which is something I love. I really enjoy it when poets focus on the actual story behind a poem rather than just throwing words together. You've weaved a simple piece that could have so many different plot lines behind it. I love it. Absolutely wouldn't change a thing.

    Much love

    -Sami
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]



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