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    dots Submission Name: Distant Friendsdots
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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 959
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1125



    Description:
       (( -PLEASE READ THIS BEFOR THE LYRIC- ))

    This isn't really a "why are we only friends lyric/poetry!?"
    More of a longing thing for a girl who lives far away and it feels like we're just friends because we can't touch or kiss.
    Thanks, leave comments please.



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    dotsDistant Friendsdots
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    The bright of your eyes illuminate my gloomy shroud,
    piercing a silent minded cloud.

    A tendancy of tears,
    bleed dry from lonley cries.
    An ascendancy for emotions for years.
    You broke my disguise,

    In two days...
    already screaming your name.
    In two days...
    already feeling a lovers pain.

    Inflicted scars to my wrists,
    from every odd twist.
    Two lovers,
    who know this will be forever.

    Forever..( I promise )

    In three days...
    asking is it okay?
    In three days...
    saying sorry for the emotional display.

    I remember when never ending nights of crying in diagnosed pain for love and affection,
    to sleep thinking I was just an infection.

    Your lightly my hearts purification,
    halting lifes impact on a laceration.

    In four days...
    making another decision.
    In four days...
    if I happen to die tonight,
    know in the end,
    it was be because we were just "friends."




    Submitted on 2005-08-30 03:46:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow Justin this was fantastic. I can't believe I hadn't read it yet... sorry, been slacking. You did an excellent job rhyming, I don't think you usually do that, I really loved it alot.
    'The bright of your eyes'... beautiful.
    I'm about to read more...
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, this was great, see i told you someone always loves you no matter what. and i think you might have that girl for the rest of your life now...good luck
    | Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by bluecrane | [ Reply to This ]
      Justin it was beautiful. But it scares me to death. I know you have been down and not eating. I hope "Inflicted scars to my wrists"
    and " if I happen to die tonight" is just part of your poem. I love you and it shall get better I promise you. Do not be in such a hurry to love someone so deeply. Love and very proud of you.
    MOM
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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