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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Death
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 94



    Description:
       Haiku format but it's a haiku I still put it as a haiku just for fun.
    None of you will probably like it.


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    Screaming to the end;
    Knowing what's beneath my feet;
    Hurting to die young.




    Submitted on 2005-08-30 03:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i don't know. indeed its not a haiku but if in some way you could have fit in the passage of time through nature it would work well. it says a lot in so little.
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Lemmy | [ Reply to This ]
      short and to a point
    i dont know how to do a [censored] hitchu thingy bob
    ya well its good but short but short its good

    was that your mom just below me?
    wow
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      hey Justin you have me very scared now. I love you and it was a nice write.
    love you
    have to get back to work.
    mom
    See you when i get home
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great for such a short poem
    A great meaning from this peice. well i don't know what else to say hope to hear from you and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh nicely said! little words big impact good job I have never written one maybe someday I will anyways peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...short but alot of meaning...i like it...for some odd reason...but i do..so deal with it!lol! no this is great..i want to kno what you were thinking at the time when you wrote this..very interesting...l8r-

    -Suicidalchild51-

    ps ur icon is cute...for some odd reason!lol!
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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