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I'm afraid

Author: AmandaLyn
ASL Info:    18/F/ Centralia
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Words: 95
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This poem, like "butterfly" is a little different writing for me. I wrote this the night before I left for college, (like 2 nights ago) and it was inspired my my boyfriend. enjoy!

I'm afraid

Hold me,
while I cry in your arms.
Just be there,
you don't have to say a thing.
Love me,
cuz I feel so alone.
Shield me,
cuz I'm so scared.

Don't you know I'm afraid,
I can't do this - I cry.
But hten you say -
it's gonna be alright,
you'll be fine,
it always works out in the end.

Kiss me,
and wipe away my tears.
Hold my hand,
and walk with me through this.
Carry me,
when I get weak.
Push me when I try to give up.

Submitted on 2005-08-30 11:26:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice write and full of emotion. Hope all goes well at college for you and remember - get stuck in and give it your best shot.
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  aww this iz a qt, very sweet, i can relate, i felt like this when starting college 3 years ago, its nice to know and feel that there is sum1 supporting you through a scary new time, but no need to be scared college was the best time of my life and would love to do it all ova again, enjoy it, that was a gud write x x x x
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]

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