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Storybook Road

Author: dmm
ASL Info:    50/M/Minnesota
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Hope no one minds if I join in the fun.

Storybook Road

Yes, I've been down Storybook Road,
Long ago when I was much younger,
Turn right just past the Lake of Mirrors
You'll be glad cause it's so much fun there.

The people dress in colors like rainbows
And the music plays so sweetly all day,
While high on the hilltop one finds silence
It's no problem if you chose to steal away.

We all drank a golden brew cool hearty
That sent a tingle from your head to your toe
And we laughed so long & hard our sides hurt
As I look back I wonder why I had to go.

I recall the splendor of those sunlit days
How it seemed dreams somehow came alive,
On the cobbled streets of Storybook Road
Where it crosses Happiness Drive.

Submitted on 2005-08-30 14:18:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey Dan, I dunno how come I missed your Storybook road...I'm glad I found it though, it's very good, the perfect metaphor for the land of dreams, away from the reality of the real world.

Bloody good job, well done.

Be Happy

| Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi Dan. first of all sorry for not commenting on your poems for so long. Now to the poem, it is lovely and cute. Unfortunately I think I have never been to the storybook road. Your piece is good as usual.
With love sanam
| Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
  Great job on this poem and I have been read'n a few of 'em. I missed out on the fun but I might give it a try yet. I always ewnjoy read'n your work and find this one amusing and bright.
Keep it up!
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  very nice addition to Storybook Road. seems we all have a different slant to it and that's really cool. i liked the reference to the "golden brew." it makes me think of the butterbeer they drink in Harry Potter. glad you joined the challenge!

stay golden,
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  A wonderful trip down memory lane. I think this title has brought out the Peter Pan in all of us. Such dreamers we are. I absolutely love cobblestone streets. Great job here, Dan. You have given your inner child the space he needed. Read mine for a different slant, if you have time.
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was awesome ya ol' hippie! Makes me want to call an old friend...just so reminisful (might not be a word but it is now).

I loved it and am glad you joined the fun. Cool, cool beans ma man. Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  oh, this is splendid! and no one minds if you join the fun. I will take the liberty of speaking for everyone that we're glad you did! I love this poem too. sort of expounds on mine. very, very nice. I think I'll make it a favorite!
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wonderful contribution - glad you decided to join in...I really liked the drive I took with this one.
I felt as if I was on the road of many of my childhood faves...
Very nice writing...I feel so giddy at the moment
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was kinda cute and the whole way through, I was thinking of The Shire in The Lord of the Rings!
I love that movie and this write was very good. It was short and very sweet and I really thought that the ending was a great way to close this piece! Nice job!
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]

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