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    dots Submission Name: Don't Wake Me Updots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
    Total Views: 1109
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1227



    Description:
       Don't really know what this is about. Mixture of things that happened today. Basically I've collapsed underneath everything and my depression was worse than I thought.


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    dotsDon't Wake Me Updots
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    Verse 1:
    My body shakes
    As I cry
    Every passing second
    I wipe my eyes
    My bridge collapsed
    It shook my world
    It broke my mask
    And knocked me out

    Chorus:
    Don't wake me up
    Let me sleep
    Let me slip away
    I'll fade away
    From all the hurt
    From all the lies
    Don't wake me up again
    Don't wake me up

    Verse 2:
    My eyes are red
    My heads' pounding
    Nails dug in my skin
    Old scars on my arm
    I wish they were bleeding
    Alcohol in my system
    From the brandy I stole
    When parents were't home

    Chorus

    Verse 3:
    Useless best friend
    Where did you go
    I'm now dead
    But you wouldn't know
    You knocked me down
    You broke me down
    Then you left me
    But you're still stabbing me

    Chorusx2

    Coda:
    My body shakes
    As I cry
    Nails dug in my skin
    Alcohol in my system
    You knocked me down
    You broke me down
    Don't wake me up again
    Don't wake me up




    Submitted on 2005-08-30 14:28:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is great pal... i so relate to the best friend part... its so true... i like the way u just expressed it ... there's a lot of emotion and i can really feel it too... nice work
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      Out of all your lyrics that I've read, I have to say I think this was the best written and thought out one yet! I mean this is what a song really is right here. Its emotions and thoughts (basically poetry) that are easy to sing to and follow. I'd have to say that this is something that would be a rock or pop song cause most of your lyrics are like that and they go so well in this one. But anyways I gotta go to school here soon so I hope that you're good and I'll talk to you later.

    Brenna
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good, multiple meanings here. I can relate to this, though I've never abused any substances, (well save one occasion) and honestly I think you are right about the feelings you get...but, I'll say it again, quit using stuff! 5 Star work

    Adjoss

    Storm
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very sad, powerful and emotional piece.
    Abandoned and betrayed and feeling so hurt and lost that you feel like dying!

    The loss is hard to deal with especially if life is already difficult and the friend was a support and you guys pulled each other through. Alot of your sad and depressed feelings may be anger that your not feeling. you need to let the anger through rather than feeling defeated and giving up!!

    This was a nice piece!


    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      damn girl you got some great song writing skills, i really liked thispart of the song,

    Useless best friend
    Where did you go
    I'm now dead
    But you wouldn't know
    You knocked me down
    You broke me down
    Then you left me
    But you're still stabbing me

    That i feel i can really relate to, and i like it when i can relating to someone else lyrics, great job. and as for that depression thing, its always worse than we think it is.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by withblindedeyez | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sad - yet positive for seeing / writing about things as they are. Everyone gets down, but the trick is to plough on ahead and see things through and that is exactly what you are doing here by sharing your thoughts / life with others - well done a really good write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Very emotional. I really liked this though t made me really sad. I hope you're really not doing some of that stuff. Things may seem bad but they'll get better. Anyway good write, great job.
    Sarah
    P.S. If you ever need someone to talk to I'm here and I'll help if I can.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good,
    nice write, what is the melody like,
    seems like pop rock to me,
    anyway thanx for sharing
    keep em cumin x x x x
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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