a minute of you by josymanthegreat

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Submission Name: a minute of you dots

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Author:	josymanthegreat
ASL Info:	21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
Elite Ratio:	4.72 - 322/349/93
Words:	77

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	212
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	432

Description:
sweet

a minute of you dots

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Looking at your picture
start thinking in my mind
how much you mean to me
how happier you make my life
you make me smile during the day
make me dream during the night
make me wake up in the morning
and sing me to sleep at night
i love you more than anything
this you already know
this isnt new to you you know
ill give up everything for a minute of you

Submitted on 2005-08-30 19:44:20 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  great write it really shows some thought and concentration like this person your talking about is a major impact on your life ~becka
| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]
  its great, it could have been a little bit longer, but hey im not busting on you. and also thanks for the stalk. i wish a guy would write a poem for me...lol
| Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by spanishvampress | [ Reply to This ]
  its short n it gets right to the point good write.. its extremely cute n i love how you put this up here well now i must go look at some more of ur work lol
| Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  aw that is sweet. would make a great love-letter...hehe...my favorite part:

you make me smile during the day
make me dream during the night
make me wake up in the morning

I liked it because it sincerely described how this person makes your life better.
| Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
  make me dream during the night
make me wake up in the morning
and sing me to sleep at night
^
i liked what it was saying but it could have been worded better. the flow in the poem was so great except for that (to me)
i really liked this
| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by I want dark | [ Reply to This ]

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