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    dots Submission Name: Witnessdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       The first section of this work deals with an individual attempting to divest himself of guilt by means of post hypnotic suggestion. However, the subject is at the mercy of the indifferent hypnotist personified in the last section. This begs the question, where is the middle ground for the offender seeking forgiveness and the offended who may have none to give?

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    Imagine you're
    back where
    it began
    that concrete
    pillar is a tree,
    and when you've felt
    soft hands caress
    your brow, you'll sever in pieces,
    cut clean. Half is
    the monster
    his wicked wish
    remains his own,
    the wraith he
    haunts is you.
    The monster will hurredly
    stride away,
    hastening to the
    taste of blood;
    each step embracing
    the silent curse
    till the hundredth
    and both are gone.

    All that's left
    an animal shell,
    weeping for children
    an enemy's soul
    sold for regret
    to the tenderest
    devil the eye
    had known.

    Although I'd prefer
    to admire your courage
    and offer sympathy,
    I can't. However,
    though you've been less
    than human, a dispassionate
    animal under the searing
    sun of unforgiveness, I'm tempted
    to toss a crumb.
    Even stray animals
    deserve to live,
    if discretion can
    muzzle their tongue.

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      This is one heck of a write

    I swear to you I felt like it was about my life
    I really saw a lot of visuals about my life in front of me reading this
    You definately captured my imagination with this write
    Great Job

    And thanks for your comments on Words
    I am glad you understood it perfectly
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      took me to a black and white movie copywrite 1955, the dialogue full of innocence and clean of any current filth...

    it was the last lightpost on in the night..only the rain could be seen by the reader, as it broke through from the dark to the light.

    Forrest M
    | Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by happy | [ Reply to This ]
      Your piece exposes the problem of the sense of human justice juxtaposed against the commandment to "love your enemies." The viewpoint lacks the aspect of love required in the act of seeking forgiveness and truly granting it. The offender does not require condonement of his terrible sins, he needs relief from the unbearable weight of shame and guilt.

    Only love is strong enough to accomodate both the contrite heart and the wounded victim.

    You did a masterful job showing the dilemma facing both the accused and the accuser.
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      An excellent piece.

    It is a daily dilemma, the line between forgiveness and resentment. Can sorry be enough? Can scars ever disappear?

    Once again, an interesting social observation, written in an enjoyable style. As always, leaves the reader thoughtful...

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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