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    dots Submission Name: All I ever wanted (not done)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 513
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 700



    Description:
       This is my verse to Twiztid's song "All I Ever Wanted"


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    dotsAll I ever wanted (not done)dots
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    All I ever wanted was to trade some shoes
    to show why I write what I do, and why fel. listens to blues
    I wanted to fit in but now I want to stand out
    show people that what they are isn't what I'm about
    I wanted to have friends but two, now, are okay
    it doesn't matter who they are or what it is they say

    All I ever wanted was some fucking respect
    and If I don't get it, to cut your fucking neck

    All I ever wanted was to get my revenge
    so many deaths around me, which I need to avenge
    hold a fucking axe just on top of your head
    a sledge hammer hits the axe, so bitch now you dead




    Submitted on 2005-08-30 22:39:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like the same line as Suicidalchild. this one wasn't that good either. i can relate but i just wasn't feeling ur wordplay.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...dont understand it but it was well witten...i liked it!it was beitchin!lol!ill read ot again when its done ight!!

    All I ever wanted was some [censored] respect

    liked that line...its what everyone wants!good job babes!

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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