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    dots Submission Name: I enjoy popdots
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    Author: Aferisan
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 17/25/15
    Words: 338
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       A poem I wrote, for giggles.


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    dotsI enjoy popdots
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    I write in silence,
    I sing alone,
    Nobody hears,
    Nobody's home

    Do I listen to the fake?
    The songs of love and hate?
    They only know how to cry, about their fortunate fate.
    Their pockets filled with money, they always try to say
    "I'd help the world, if I could, but I can't and not today"

    Disgusting some would say,
    in everybody's eyes,
    those posers in flashy suits,
    trying to be the "guys"

    The "guys" who take our money
    And complain about it too
    yet we give and give
    No complaint from me or you

    They like the title artists
    but what do they create?

    They make the group, the in, the fad,
    A sickness for the rich and bad,
    We buy and buy and buy, to make the group
    Failure to buy makes, you out of the loop

    They say they are different,
    They are the newest thing
    But in fact,
    It's just same old spring
    The spring that catches us, despite its change of face

    No innocence is carried, in the industrial plane
    Just the average face, of sellout jack and jane
    I'd like to snipe a few, snipe some sucky bands
    But sadly its useless, like kicking desert sands

    Too many I say, too many,
    They grow in a fetid place,
    In our hearts and in our homes,
    Brainwashing the whole place

    MTV, please choose me,
    I have no other want,
    To become another faceless band,
    With countless dollars to flaunt,

    I'm just jealous aren't I,
    How fickle my choice would be,
    If I was switched with their place,
    What a happy me you'd see,

    Like all those pretty blondes,
    With pretty little heads,
    Full of fluff and nothing,
    Smarter when they're dead

    In end my poetic rant.
    Ceases to live its rage,
    Come about with stupid kids,
    And their stupid ideas,
    Finding comradeship,
    With those who wouldn't care,
    I guess i'm done right now,
    Bye bye, I admit I love to flare




    Submitted on 2005-08-31 21:21:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      For as long as I remember 'artists' have needed promoters or in years past they were 'patrons'. Unfotunately now days turning pretty faces into stars has become an art in itself and the huge buying block, young teens, seem to gobble it up like candy. My teen years were spent listening to the British Invasion music along with Dylan and the old blues masters. Some of that was promoted heavily by the music machine some not. Things are worse today. I liked hearing someone speak up and recognize the situation for what it is. You wrote this piece well and the message came through clear and accepting that you might grab that brass ring if you had the chance is OK, it shows you are practical and insightful. Nice job! Dan
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      this is more of a criticism than a poem. i agree with you that so many people are posers. they're everywhere. on tv on the radio in the white house! everywhere! money seems to be their primary motivation. anyway... liked your rant!

    keep on writing
    kataclysmic
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by kataclysmic | [ Reply to This ]
      ok I agree that so many untatlented people sit in a spot light and shine. Just when i was thinkingt this poetic is a whiner you say it... which i liked. But the good artist get reconized by us small people with no money
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by mandy dupuis | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't really say anything to be criticicla of this piece, since it is a very clever piece of criticism about the world and what the machine is spitting out. For me I've started to see this as the great human sickness, ego selling and buying. Pffff...I agree totally with you. What's sad is that is is rampant even in "alternative culture"...nice rant! U have eyes.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Shea Comet | [ Reply to This ]



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