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    dots Submission Name: freestylingdots

    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 301
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 725
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       thsi is just me freestlyin have no idea where it came from just decide to wild out thanks for the comments that r given

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    Sittin hear tryin to write a post for elite
    Get subject from wut goes on in the street
    People try to bash me because im young
    But the have not herd the future words that will come out my tonuge
    Listen to prophetic words of nas and tupac
    Died so early making talent go unlocked
    U ask me its not far but wut is a man to do
    Think bout thats just make a nigger blue
    Click the remote of the brain cell killer
    And there goes a child molester singing thriller
    Time flows like water and passes like a train
    These lyrics aint even good wut a shame
    Then i see me gurl and retnas gaze upon eyes
    Wishing i could have wuts inbetween them thighs
    But i cant because i would not offend her like that
    So insted i settle for a more romantic chat
    How was ur day and what inbetween the time intervals of our last meet
    All i say is that during that time i felt incomplete
    Without u it felt like an entire lifetime pass
    Still wonder when i going to get that ass
    But now u have to leave because its getting late
    As asine as the rhymes are i still havethe skill to create
    Check the tim piece and and a quater past elven
    Falling asleep creaming about meeting the dead in heaven
    Wake up to the buzz of the alarm clock
    Had a dream about beyounce woke up with a hard cock
    But it went away as the urine flowed from me like blood being drawn
    Like at the arlarm and catch a glipse that its already dawn
    And again my dad starts over with the remote in my hand
    I guess this how god had my life planned
    Heavy knowledge

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      that was pretty sweet dude. You really got some good [censored] in the second half. I like this line "Wake up to the buzz of the alarm clock
    Had a dream about beyounce woke up with a hard cock" its probably my favorite. Good stuff... keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]
      haha that was some funny [censored].the part that realy got me rolling was the dream of beyonce. if this is waht comes of the top of your head i cant wait to read your other work.

    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      haha. that was the best freestyle i ever heard outta u. if that was a freestyle, then u freestyle is pretty much as good as ur rapping cuz i can seriously see u writing this. but if u type a freestyle u have more time to think than if ur really freestyling out loud. were u talking about laurin? whatever black man. seems like u still got it and katrina didn't wash away ur skills. keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      That was tight. I think it would be better with a beat cuz u kinda dont get it in some areas. N-E-wayz Im sorry that ya girl aint given you none, but atleast it gives you somethin to write about.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]

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